on ship by Sh|t?
3 Mar 2003, 5:35 AM
as weak as an old man's bladder.
on some deleted poem
13 Jan 2003, 11:38 AM
supremely different. Bravo.
on I did not have sexual relations with that woman by scitz
24 Feb 2003, 6:03 AM
perhaps cum and go?
on Suicidal thoughts by CrAzYlAdY Surukain
24 Feb 2003, 6:07 AM
Don't do it. You need to stick around to write more poetry.
on On The First Night by OneFingerAnswer
24 Feb 2003, 6:04 AM
Nice, but seems to lack anything concrete or precise.
on RAP MASTER by UAFANTHORPEY
13 Jan 2003, 11:36 AM
general inconsistent tone.
on Suicidal Thoughts #2 by CrAzYlAdY Surukain
24 Feb 2003, 6:10 AM
It is not worth it. Pull yourself out of your funk. Eat some chocolate, watch a comedy, go for a walk or a run--even if it is cold outside (especially if its cold outside) then write some more poems.
on unbroken by roses are read
15 Jan 2003, 7:47 AM
rhyme scheme A+
line length A+
rhythm C (inconsistent stresses)
meaning B
Grade - 8
line length A+
rhythm C (inconsistent stresses)
meaning B
Grade - 8
on Rose Wall by Carvaceous
13 Jan 2003, 9:57 AM
they won't grow. they're made of paint, you silly goose! (just kidding) a valliant attempt! an 8.
on Little Tounge by Figure 8
14 Jan 2003, 7:48 AM
what is a "tounge"? according to www.dictionary.com, the closest word is "lounge". but I guess if you are "licking" with it, perhaps it is a tongue. Even so, this "sing-song" thing here is of little merit.
on Another Day by Brighteyes
13 Jan 2003, 9:53 AM
sounds troubled--like a therapy poem. I hope you are feeling better, but you should keep therapy poems to yourself--too often thet sound exactly like this and come across as trite.
on For those who play with shit by <{Baba^Yaga}>
3 Mar 2003, 5:31 AM
I was doing fine until you made fun of bacon. it is my breakfast meat of choice, and it is not gay.
however, the last is the best.
however, the last is the best.
on Grouchy Smurf (in limerick) by Bachus
3 Mar 2003, 5:29 AM
most likely all of the above. 8 grins.
on strange beds (1983) by Bill Z Bub
13 Jan 2003, 9:55 AM
nicely done. solid 9.
on some deleted poem
13 Jan 2003, 9:58 AM
I can't wait until you publish--let me know when you do so I can buy your book.
on He put a price on her head by Nanshe
24 Feb 2003, 6:06 AM
just buggy.
on I gots me a postcard, motherfucker. by <{Baba^Yaga}>
13 Jan 2003, 9:45 AM
certainly unique.
on a poet in the city by Bill Z Bub
13 Jan 2003, 10:01 AM
I like the first half a lot.