on some deleted poem
1 Oct 2003, 4:34 PM
Talk about yawn, fuck, this is a coma.
on Spider Meth Adventure by Y2kSlamPoet
20 Sep 2003, 12:29 PM
Don't take his anti drug propaganda to heart young one. Even Ashcroft likes a cocaine enima once in a while. the problem with dark angel and drugs is simple, notice.
Wheelchair no sexlife
__________ X ____________ = A BAD TRIP
constipation Mechanical charisma
Could you imagine?
Da, (in mechanical voice tripping balls) -- Waht are you staring at?
7-11 guy -- (hindu voice) pardon me please?
Da-- I said what are you staring at towel head, quit looking at me like you want to buff my spokes, or clean my trachianomy tube vishnu, DAMN YOU. (he hits the button to activate his evacuation harness)
Hindu #2 -- That gross fucking mechanical dolly enbrowned my freshly waxed an sealed linoleum. I hate 4x4 with harnesses an angels, especially when they are stoned.
Wheelchair no sexlife
__________ X ____________ = A BAD TRIP
constipation Mechanical charisma
Could you imagine?
Da, (in mechanical voice tripping balls) -- Waht are you staring at?
7-11 guy -- (hindu voice) pardon me please?
Da-- I said what are you staring at towel head, quit looking at me like you want to buff my spokes, or clean my trachianomy tube vishnu, DAMN YOU. (he hits the button to activate his evacuation harness)
Hindu #2 -- That gross fucking mechanical dolly enbrowned my freshly waxed an sealed linoleum. I hate 4x4 with harnesses an angels, especially when they are stoned.
on The Uraeus (title by horus) by Y2kSlamPoet
20 Sep 2003, 11:52 AM
Nicely done.
on Janine (a set of haikus) by capachijim
20 Sep 2003, 11:57 AM
It's good, but it aint that good. 7.
on some deleted poem
20 Sep 2003, 11:54 AM
Man boobs are trendy.
on Deceit by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
30 Sep 2003, 5:13 PM
I simply adore the way you blatantly ponder the relevance in defining style. That, and my honey fetish allowed me to vote high for this regardless of the style spanking pieces.
on some deleted poem
1 Oct 2003, 3:17 PM
It's amazing what me you and Da come up with in our free time. Last night I found some lint in my neighbors Timothy Hutton (navelator)
on some deleted poem
1 Oct 2003, 3:19 PM
What? Ha ha ha. What? Talk about stringing some words together in an interesting way? But this isn't poetry it's Alphabet poop.
on Unloyal Poon (Free Puss) by A Spanish Devil by <{Baba^Yaga}>
3 Oct 2003, 2:17 PM
I most often make myself laugh the hardest.
on Under Blood Oak by horus8
3 Oct 2003, 2:18 PM
A sad bitter leif Garret
on some deleted poem
3 Oct 2003, 2:53 PM
Titles pliz. So that I might wipe my pooky with it's fine binding spine.
on Ghost of Gloaming by Don-Quixote
7 Oct 2003, 10:21 PM
A dastardly piece of factual trivia, bravo. 10.
on some deleted poem
7 Oct 2003, 10:25 PM
ha ha ha... more like an earth cracking roar! A six 6, I'm sorry but I've seen you avoid cliches much better than this sack of drowning puppys.
on some deleted poem
7 Oct 2003, 10:26 PM
I did like the last line, and I will give you that it made me laugh jovial and all.
on Why You All Suck by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
7 Oct 2003, 10:44 PM
A serious piece of serious pieces 10
on SIR FRASER by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w
7 Oct 2003, 10:55 PM
almost.8
on silent struggle by princesszoe
7 Oct 2003, 11:05 PM
hoochie coo. 8.
on My Instructions or My Tongue In My Cheek? by Patsy
7 Oct 2003, 11:49 PM
An excellent assemblage of words.
[_] About drugs
[_] About romantic love
[_] About writing
[_] About suicide or self-mutilation
[X_] About the author's social pastimes
[X_] Arbitrary indentation
[X_] Arbitrary line breaks
[_] Autobiographical but written in the third person
[X_] Clerical errors
[_] Clichéd imagery (gazing out of window, tears falling like rain)
[_] Clichéd rhymes (love/above, heart/apart)
[_] Clichéd angst words (putrid, wretched)
[X_] Devoid of rhyme
[_] Devoid of other linguistic embellishments (alliteration, onomatopoeia)
[_] Devoid of other literary devices (simile, synaesthesia)
[_] Devoid of wondrous or fantastical imagery
[X_] Ellipses used overabundantly
[X] Insipidly whimsical or zany
[_] Internet shorthand or emoticons
[_] Leaving rant
[X_] Lower case only
[_] 'Lyrics'
[X_] Melodramatic
[_] Naively religious or superstitious
[_] Obsessed with femininity
[X_] Pointedly unanswered questions
[_] Rage against the machine
[_] Repetition of a word or phrase to the point of nausea
[_X] Sanctimonious
[_] Self-obsessed
[_] Sentimental
[_] Smugly-named protagonist
[XXXXXXXXXXXXXXXX to infinity] Thesaurophilia
[_] Untitled
[_] Vicarious wish fulfilment SP