on some deleted poem
2 Jun 2003, 2:26 PM
One hundred forty two, yesterday, the middle of nowhere
on some deleted poem
13 Jun 2003, 11:00 AM
More Angels???... well much as I'm not a fan of Angels I admit I like this. Extremely well in fact. -8-
on So Simple by Audaciouslilgrl
13 Jun 2003, 11:10 AM
You forgot teaching your dog to fetch with dynomite and then then lighting the fuse. -6-
on One Night Stand by Audaciouslilgrl
13 Jun 2003, 10:41 AM
I suggest replacing farce with charade, and instead of Of a wishful ache, I'd go with With a wishful. <- I think that it goes better with the momentary release.
on Advise by Audaciouslilgrl
13 Jun 2003, 11:07 AM
You really over did it at the end with all the OO ryhmes. I think you should take Rob's Advice and Read some more poetry, cause we see alot of cliche poems here. Its not too bad a poem but maybe next time forget the ryhme and just say what your trying to say.
on Triolet, for Jason by beakism
6 Jun 2003, 2:10 PM
Speaking without Knowledge, isn't that what your mocking me for here? I do Happen to know about Libel and Slander, and copyright protections. I may not be a lawyer but as a DJ for a radio station I have to know about such things.
So next time you assume someone has no clue what the hell they are talking about, make sure they don't.
So next time you assume someone has no clue what the hell they are talking about, make sure they don't.
on Jeremi B. Handrinos: Part 2 by wCUNTw
5 Jun 2003, 2:46 PM
Your right he's not.
on some deleted poem
3 Jun 2003, 9:25 AM
Good Luck Kim and Tek, I wish you well, sorry you decided to call it quits, but thats how things turn out I guess, hoping you'll change your minds but not expecting it...
-Jason-
-Jason-
on some deleted poem
2 Jun 2003, 2:05 PM
Worst thing you've ever wrote, but the dedication, to D.A. and J.H. Was almost funny. No offense ment but this sux. -2-
on Stealing lightning from the pulpit by horus8
2 Jun 2003, 2:12 PM
Sound proposal to me.
on some deleted poem
2 Jun 2003, 3:14 PM
Preach! Preach!
on some deleted poem
31 May 2003, 3:23 PM
Issues, No More like Volumes LoL
on some deleted poem
30 May 2003, 8:22 AM
And what has the meaning of Cauliflower = Cauliflower have a thing to do with the price of tea in China?
on some deleted poem
27 May 2003, 6:01 PM
Lame and sounds like it was made by a 4th grader, as a joke to make his friends laugh.
on Blush Of The Winter Rose by kassanna
27 May 2003, 6:18 PM
Yes Roses are out dated but nowhere other than the title does it actually say rose. I think Its a little harash to say that they'll Never write that well Bachus, I mean hey who knows? I give this a -7- cause its not bad but is a bit cliche(no offense), even tho you did the cliche well, I'm afraid I've seen better.
on I Am(Defined) by lil cindy lu who
27 May 2003, 5:58 PM
Meh, I have a hard time relating each stanza to the others execept 1 and 4. -6- But only cause I see room for improvement.
on some deleted poem
27 May 2003, 6:22 PM
I thought the first line repeation really made it work well together -9-
on some deleted poem
30 May 2003, 7:58 AM
LOL Makes me never want to piss you off.