replying on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe
9 Aug 2003, 9:23 AM
Cliche are Ideas that are over used. Mostly anything classical is going to be cliche, because they are well tred words that have been used all to often, because someone saw them, or heard them and has repeated them. The thing about famous poems from the past is that they had there critics at there time too. I liked the point you tryed to make very valid, but this is today, not the days of yesteryear. I'm saying that its quite good, despite being cliche.
replying on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe
8 Aug 2003, 10:25 PM
A little harsh on the crit there don't you think? I mean after all, its not as bad as say, Museheart, or anything now is it?
replying on The Bunny, The Wench, and The Troll by Billy Fights
8 Aug 2003, 9:02 PM
Thank you very much Horus. Coming from you that truly is a compliment.
replying on God is a Lady by thepinkbunnyofdoom
8 Aug 2003, 8:52 PM
Thank you very much indeed Horus, and I agree. Only I think He likes to make it more personal than that. He likes to toy with them down on a sick perverted almost hostile, and definately Deranged level. He is most certainly a Jew.
replying on The Bunny, The Wench, and The Troll by Billy Fights
8 Aug 2003, 6:09 PM
Its actually Directed at this guy, who thought he'd be a smart ass and challenge me to a fight in my livejournal because I said some mean things about his girlfriend that he never even got to read. Mind you, they were all true things. If you want you may read the comments past between me, the wench, and the troll.
http://www.livejournal.com/users/pinkbun
I find them to be a riot, so I thought I'd share my exploits.
http://www.livejournal.com/users/pinkbun
I find them to be a riot, so I thought I'd share my exploits.
replying on God is a Lady by thepinkbunnyofdoom
8 Aug 2003, 4:38 PM
Thanks. I'd like to think that I've grown with every poem I've posted, but this is really a new spurt I guess. Thanks again.
on Weeping Willow by LuckyJoe
8 Aug 2003, 12:31 PM
Definatly gotta be the top one. Go with what you like in poetry. Look never be unwilling to try something new but if it doesn't work out for you then don't do it. Simply put. The top version is well worth a -10- from me. The bottom would be an -8-. So here is a -10-.
on Undertow by eliastemplar
8 Aug 2003, 12:26 PM
Um... Correct me if I'm wrong here but this isn't a Haiku right? I mean 5-7-5? This is 5, maybe 6, and 4. No vote from me on this one.
replying on Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom
7 Aug 2003, 4:41 PM
haha, bravo. Touche, and Thanks for a new Idea.
on My Fart Is Eternally Yours (Free Sniff) By Yo-Yo by DreamerSupreme
7 Aug 2003, 2:14 PM
lol. You really do seem to have been studying under Horus. -10-.
replying on God is a Lady by thepinkbunnyofdoom
7 Aug 2003, 12:53 PM
Horus would know. Check it out now.
on Inet. mag. editors R jealous red haired Jews, oh and I'm 29 by horus8
7 Aug 2003, 10:40 AM
lol. Happy Birthday Horus, Happy Birthday. -10-
on The Belgian Bookworm [revised] by DreamerSupreme
7 Aug 2003, 2:21 AM
Needed more comparison to a king in his throne for the last line to have worked for me. -8-
replying on Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom
7 Aug 2003, 2:15 AM
lol. I didn't know that you could pardon blasphemy seeing as to how your looking at it in those terms.
replying on Speaking my mind. Brilliant Idea! by thepinkbunnyofdoom
7 Aug 2003, 2:05 AM
What the hell? What are you talking about? This has nothing to do with actually being wounded.
on Yellow Cake for Everyone by Retaliate
7 Aug 2003, 2:04 AM
Nice, that actually took me a second to get. -8- Just because I ended up laughing without really getting it until I read it a second time.
Yuck. If I knew the proper spelling of the sound of vomiting I'd do it right now. This poem is so trite that I didn't get past the second line of the 4th stanza. Have you no consideration for others? If this is the kinda of poetry your going to write, stop right now. I mean it. I rarely give zeros, but this deserves one too much. I'll be nice and leave it at where my comment stands. On the bright side at least it shouldn't be too hard to for improvement, cause hopefully not everything you'll write can be this bad. -0-
on Angel by abecedarian
7 Aug 2003, 1:45 AM
Wierd, First that the poem right next to this is also entitled Angel, I wonder how often that kinda thing happens and second sex with an angel. I'm sorry I know there are lots of pictures of female angels and things but have you ever read about one in any religious doctrine? I haven't. Just wierd kiddo. Beautiful Imagery and well written in my opinion. Also wrong by those standards but whatever. -9-.
replying on My own Truism by Billy Fights
5 Aug 2003, 2:29 AM
Maybe, but how many 4th grade poems do you see here? I'm really getting into childrens poetry for some odd reason.
replying on American Eden by Don-Quixote
4 Aug 2003, 1:02 PM
I could, but not without some thermo nuclear goggles and a qp.