on A Little Nightmare by Teen14
31 Jan 2003, 4:52 PM
Your close to caputing it but maybe a few less gomez runs at the beginning so that you build a sort of increasing frenzy.
on Because The Ground Is Still Frozen by razorgrin
31 Jan 2003, 4:47 PM
Next time try
Drinking Vodka
open cupboard, grab bottle
sit back and enjoy
Drinking Vodka
open cupboard, grab bottle
sit back and enjoy
replying on Jesus rides the comet by Shardik
31 Jan 2003, 4:38 PM
I noticed that in the song its
"Frankenstien is teaching kindergarden in the vally
Count Dracula sould his fangs to the Japanese
The Wolf man went Ivy League..." and so on and so forth.
Sounds very trippy much better in the song. Thanks.
"Frankenstien is teaching kindergarden in the vally
Count Dracula sould his fangs to the Japanese
The Wolf man went Ivy League..." and so on and so forth.
Sounds very trippy much better in the song. Thanks.
on Jesus rides the comet by Shardik
31 Jan 2003, 12:17 PM
Got to agree with razorgrin this is quite swell.
on Equality by Freethinker1602
31 Jan 2003, 12:09 PM
I know I don't have any room to talk but I don't know the "so run far and pray your feet be swift be quick witted" just Doesn't seem to fit in well.
replying on Perversions by razorgrin
30 Jan 2003, 11:23 AM
as you have you have noted i am one to get lost in the haste of the momment so i'll be egarly waiting fo it to to be posted.
replying on me, Deep-as-a-puddle and the elusive connection by lunar
29 Jan 2003, 6:07 PM
i have another fun game for them to play its called russian roulette? Any takers?
replying on me, Deep-as-a-puddle and the elusive connection by lunar
29 Jan 2003, 6:04 PM
What next D.A. you want to give me a spelling lesson?
on A Green Moons Haze by pink_punk_kisses87
29 Jan 2003, 5:29 PM
I agree its a ten but you might change threw to through. It'd make it so that someone didn't mentally trip over your words, unless that was what you were going for.
on A Day, Wasted by Joyleaf
29 Jan 2003, 5:24 PM
Been there done that and i like this one. So i give you an dime.
on Beauty, sleeping by Ranger
29 Jan 2003, 5:20 PM
Wow were screwed up fairy tale you got there but i liked it till i got to the captain part but it got good again with the wolf so here is a great big Eight
on Xmas gifts list by lunar
29 Jan 2003, 4:30 PM
original. strange but original. bsed soley on that a ten.
on me, Deep-as-a-puddle and the elusive connection by lunar
29 Jan 2003, 4:27 PM
your a Mondern Day Confusus
on The poemranker desk by lunar
29 Jan 2003, 4:16 PM
I know its probably just one of those random things seeing as to how this was here before i even joined poemranker but your first "dootle" looks like a bunny and this is just so cool so 10
on Breaking Away by wickedemon4
29 Jan 2003, 3:15 PM
Great feeling behind your words but you got a little abstract toward the end. Kin would also sound cooler if you replaced it with breathern <- (Probably mispelled that but who cares). I give it a nine.
on Random thoughts poem-do not try to find a meaning for there are too many. by lunar
29 Jan 2003, 2:51 PM
such depth i wouldn't even dare to try and phathom the the meaning but some how it sings to my soul. Execellent poem.