on Night-mare by INTRANSIT
20 Nov 2002, 8:20 PM
this feels like clumsily-aimed cruelty. perhaps you will say it is brutal honesty, with a modicum of compassion. but i don't feel it. it is outside of you, and you are trying too hard to get in. false.
replying on Orange Hills (Villanelle) by Moss
20 Nov 2002, 7:18 PM
yes. he does. i bring my own baggage to the reading of this. which is why i have not commented further, or voted on it yet. i read it and i like it, but iwanted it to be more strict and still woo me. and it seems to me that you could accomplish that. so i'll sit for a spell, and come back when i am...even.
replying on Absence by newdawnfades
20 Nov 2002, 2:44 PM
psst...he doesn't have hair (much)!
replying on St. Germain & The Charismatically Uncomitted by <{Baba^Yaga}>
20 Nov 2002, 10:08 AM
baba, did your uterus fall out again?
is that why you're so cranky today?
there is so much anger on the site today. i'm guilty too.
but i'm feeling the love now, baby...feeling the love...
is that why you're so cranky today?
there is so much anger on the site today. i'm guilty too.
but i'm feeling the love now, baby...feeling the love...
replying on boy girl by little_angel_maria
20 Nov 2002, 9:43 AM
it's so tiny i can't see it
replying on Orange Hills (Villanelle) by Moss
20 Nov 2002, 9:02 AM
you can even hear him read it on this site.
see that nicholas jones?
get a welshie to read it for you! and post it!
see that nicholas jones?
get a welshie to read it for you! and post it!
replying on Orange Hills (Villanelle) by Moss
20 Nov 2002, 9:01 AM
yes. that part qualifies. but the essence of the vilanelle is the repeated lines over the event of the peom. see 'do not go gentle into that good night':
http://www.poets.org/poems/poems.cfm?prm
http://www.poets.org/poems/poems.cfm?prm
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
20 Nov 2002, 8:50 AM
back to the midlands, that you love so well?
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
20 Nov 2002, 8:32 AM
now you're speedy d?
why can't you just go back to being d, like i loved before? why does everything always have to change? what happened to your wings?
you should worry. you abandon me like that, and leave me all alone to defend myself against a girl whose claim to fame is that she likes cucmbers and her prof thinks she's good. thanks.
what's a girl to do?
i gave back his chainsaw, so i am now defenseless.
why can't you just go back to being d, like i loved before? why does everything always have to change? what happened to your wings?
you should worry. you abandon me like that, and leave me all alone to defend myself against a girl whose claim to fame is that she likes cucmbers and her prof thinks she's good. thanks.
what's a girl to do?
i gave back his chainsaw, so i am now defenseless.
replying on "Why would I need to get in touch with you?" by Limness
20 Nov 2002, 8:26 AM
the action of not thinking and saying. that he did not think when the words came out; that he did not thik what they would mean, what they did mean. also, it's like a physical blow, set apart like that--because i expected him to think, to care, to not be such a tool.
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
20 Nov 2002, 8:22 AM
i have a lot of theories about kiki. most of them knee-jerks, due to her suave bedside manner. but i have tried to keep my claws in. so far. she obviously thinks she's superior. too bad she doesn't understand that we are here to help each other get better. if she wants to be miss starshine, she can trot her ass off someplace else where only perfect poets post. or at least those endorsed by 'quite good' published poets and profs.
i wonder if he thinks she is as talented 'twixt the linen as on it. only the finest.
i wonder if he thinks she is as talented 'twixt the linen as on it. only the finest.
replying on the pot collected water when it hid us from the rain by kiki
20 Nov 2002, 8:11 AM
they're part of it. they beat you down. there are comforts to be shared with others that will lift you up. dwell on whichever suits you. i have made my choice.
scraps--you don't like the convoluted metaphor of food/wood leftovers being 'fed' (consumed) by that which prepares the food? the whole business of the residual of how he earns the food and nothing wasted from the job either? no? that's why i used scraps. i wanted nothing wasted. i wanted the wood to be food as well.
spent--echoes 'exausted' in meaning. good vowel repeat. i'm a sucker for sonorous soundings, p&k. yes?
spent--echoes 'exausted' in meaning. good vowel repeat. i'm a sucker for sonorous soundings, p&k. yes?
replying on Haiku Gymraeg by Nicholas Jones
20 Nov 2002, 7:56 AM
i wish i could hear it though. pretty please?