on grope by Mister Cakes
9 Sep 2002, 7:21 PM
flange?
on The Flame of My Country by sylbaryn
9 Sep 2002, 7:18 PM
I stumbled through the reading of this, both due to its (overly?) cryptic nature, and that I couldn't really find a flow in it. Especially "The book is a guide/ But the ring is music from design". And are the stars crying out for pain or from pain? or is it not the stars' pain... hmm... like I said, cryptic. And a bit confusing. :)
on My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus
9 Sep 2002, 5:26 PM
not really haikus. haikus "need" two contrasting images.
on BEAKBOY, A Tale Of Suffering by beakism
8 Sep 2002, 12:55 PM
this is hilarious and well done. :)
replying on Don't Wanna Know by nightii
8 Sep 2002, 4:55 AM
la la la test.
on Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism
8 Sep 2002, 2:55 AM
I see. So basically you were anally raped? or is that a rocketship?
on A poem from the sky by Roisin
8 Sep 2002, 2:04 AM
poem rhythm/flow/cliche could use some work.
on The Seasons, Changes by Frass
5 Sep 2002, 10:37 PM
I can attest -- their ips look nothing alike. but whatever. people believe what they like, and even the best things in life can be faked. ;) (sorry this is offtopic)
on Father O Father O Father of Fools by dougsoderstrom
3 Sep 2002, 2:56 AM
almost amazing.
on Zanzibar by sunfloweronfire
24 Aug 2002, 4:01 PM
I didn't like the line "curious cranes" rhyming with "sweet sugar cane". and the self-reference was a bit much.
on Dark Lady by quantumenterprises
22 Aug 2002, 1:58 PM
choppy scansion. though I appreciate that it's to a beer. :) [temporal paradises that last eternal] is especially awkward.
on Dressed to Kill by DespondentDotCom
22 Aug 2002, 1:56 PM
I think I'm missing something with the middle line that ties the poem together. carter's stanley knife?
on ode to bad taco meat by gay
22 Aug 2002, 1:56 PM
hmm. same ips as balthazar, zzinnia66, malvolio... don't see any correlation with da's ips, though. ?
on Death and the Non-Scanning Poem by tooniron
22 Aug 2002, 12:58 PM
cute.
on Untitled 2 by nightii
12 Aug 2002, 8:31 PM
very well put; sure, it's the same old same old, but I don't think I've seen it so concisely formed.
on good-bye kansas city: meditation #2 by poetandknowit
12 Aug 2002, 8:30 PM
good surrealism.
on drowning in the bookstore by yarlgrenn
12 Aug 2002, 6:14 PM
interesting. I... almost like it. I might if I were in a different mood. It seems sloppily well done.
on Sophisticant by Bluesee
11 Aug 2002, 7:10 PM
The words really feel like they were pounded to fit the rhmye and meter you wanted; very awkward to read.