Re: grope by Mister Cakes	9-Sep-02/7:21 PM
flange?
Re: The Flame of My Country by sylbaryn	9-Sep-02/7:18 PM
I stumbled through the reading of this, both due to its (overly?) cryptic nature, and that I couldn't really find a flow in it. Especially "The book is a guide/ But the ring is music from design". And are the stars crying out for pain or from pain? or is it not the stars' pain... hmm... like I said, cryptic. And a bit confusing. :)
Re: My cousin's baby sitter. by Bachus	9-Sep-02/5:26 PM
not really haikus. haikus "need" two contrasting images.
Re: BEAKBOY, A Tale Of Suffering by beakism	8-Sep-02/12:55 PM
this is hilarious and well done. :)
Re: a comment on Don't Wanna Know by nightii	8-Sep-02/4:55 AM
la la la test.
Re: Mean Matt was so mean, when a homeless guy asked him for change he gave him a -blank- by beakism	8-Sep-02/2:55 AM
I see. So basically you were anally raped? or is that a rocketship?
Re: A poem from the sky by Roisin	8-Sep-02/2:04 AM
poem rhythm/flow/cliche could use some work.
Re: birds by pjenkins	7-Sep-02/11:47 PM
cute. flow could use some work.
Re: The Seasons, Changes by Frass	5-Sep-02/10:37 PM
I can attest -- their ips look nothing alike. but whatever. people believe what they like, and even the best things in life can be faked. ;) (sorry this is offtopic)
Re: Father O Father O Father of Fools by dougsoderstrom	3-Sep-02/2:56 AM
almost amazing.
Re: Zanzibar by sunfloweronfire	24-Aug-02/4:01 PM
I didn't like the line "curious cranes" rhyming with "sweet sugar cane". and the self-reference was a bit much.
Re: Dead Eye by kthulah	22-Aug-02/1:59 PM
cute. stumbles in a few places, and couldn't follow the "thought" from one end to the other, but... cute.
Re: Dark Lady by quantumenterprises	22-Aug-02/1:58 PM
choppy scansion. though I appreciate that it's to a beer. :) [temporal paradises that last eternal] is especially awkward.
Re: Dressed to Kill by DespondentDotCom	22-Aug-02/1:56 PM
I think I'm missing something with the middle line that ties the poem together. carter's stanley knife?
Re: ode to bad taco meat by gay	22-Aug-02/1:56 PM
hmm. same ips as balthazar, zzinnia66, malvolio... don't see any correlation with da's ips, though. ?
Re: Good Bye by josh_5o	22-Aug-02/12:59 PM
doesn't scan well. helps a bit to drop up to "Too complicated". or even to "The most beautifully". still reads roughly, though.
Re: Death and the Non-Scanning Poem by tooniron	22-Aug-02/12:58 PM
cute.
Re: Untitled 2 by nightii	12-Aug-02/8:31 PM
very well put; sure, it's the same old same old, but I don't think I've seen it so concisely formed.
Re: good-bye kansas city: meditation #2 by poetandknowit	12-Aug-02/8:30 PM
good surrealism.
Re: drowning in the bookstore by yarlgrenn	12-Aug-02/6:14 PM
interesting. I... almost like it. I might if I were in a different mood. It seems sloppily well done.