Re: My Sun by T. Becquerel	23-Apr-02/3:07 AM
hmm.
Re: Dammit by Cha no Onna	23-Apr-02/12:42 AM
argh!? please tell me it's not due to poemranker crashing. please?
Re: solace by crin	23-Apr-02/12:16 AM
this has a really nice pounding flow. :)
Re: in love with jane doe by crin	23-Apr-02/12:16 AM
eep! this disappeared!?
Re: For fun by Cha no Onna	22-Apr-02/8:57 PM
just to clarify, as it seems I've give a couple folks heart attacks: I know who shel silverstein is. I don't know the particular poem that you're "ripping off". :)
Re: For fun by Cha no Onna	17-Apr-02/7:31 PM
very cute. I don't know the silverstein you're referring to, so I don't know how much apology is necessary. :)
Re: Moon and Azalea by Aidaho	14-Apr-02/11:50 PM
very pretty. =)
Re: Quandries of a Summer-night's Green by Modulo	13-Apr-02/12:59 AM
get a tissue.
Re: Cosmic Imbalance by Modulo	13-Apr-02/12:58 AM
must! vote! six! =)
Re: Loneliness by Cha no Onna	13-Apr-02/12:57 AM
I think this has too many different images glommed into one for me, too much going on. rain == sky tears == sky is crying... tears are bleeding... so rain is rolling off the flowers... jeweled fishnet? a spider's web? outside the window. I think with all the extras tossed in, the meaning is less powerful.
Re: Ifni's birthday by Cha no Onna	12-Apr-02/11:25 PM
:rofl: hilarious! :) haiku. :)
Re: in love with jane doe by crin	12-Apr-02/5:22 PM
I like bits and pieces of this poem immensely, if those could just be picked out and put in a proper frame... "Your eyes are the eeriest shade of pure pale green" actually... I really *don't* like "your eyes are more beautiful than the universe" -- too simple, too easy, doesn't say anything. Then the next stanza seems to fumble and not really connect to the end of the poem. The end (you're shattered glass ... if only I could be so luck) I like. I just need a better understanding of the situation, the middle needs... otherness and explanation, for me.
Re: Starving by ifni	12-Apr-02/5:19 PM
I was *so* glad you said "smile without smirking" instead of "smile without smiling". Overall, beautiful. I didn't like "your joy resounds" -- it didn't feel like it went with the rest of the poem.
Re: High Speed College Life by Modulo	11-Apr-02/9:31 AM
definitely one of my favorites. :)
Re: Smaller by Modulo	11-Apr-02/9:31 AM
I love how you packed the word "minimalism" into a haiku. I'm not sure what I think of the title being required as a lead-in, though.
Re: Question of the day by PooP	7-Apr-02/3:24 PM
Pbtbtbtbtbbtbt.
Re: Gypsy by roses are read	6-Apr-02/8:08 PM
very pretty. As a poem, I'd like more substance/explanation of what's being described... as a song, well, I want to hear the music, but I almost can -- it's very pretty. very, very pretty. :)
Re: Have you ever heard of William Carlost Williams 24 by notule	5-Apr-02/11:15 PM
24 or 33? [confusion all around?]
Re: Impatience always backfires 913 by notule	5-Apr-02/11:15 PM
I liked some of the individual bits but not the sum of the pieces.
Re: Greeny nature by chigurukala	5-Apr-02/5:41 PM
I'm afraid I don't get this at all. Each of the lines I can take individually, and I suppose there's a single image presented, but the image doesn't do anything for me... I don't understand why I'm being presented the image, if I'm supposed to take meaning from it or enjoy it or... [I don't find beauty in it to enjoy...]