on in love with jane doe by crin
23 Apr 2002, 12:16 AM
eep! this disappeared!?
on For fun by Cha no Onna
22 Apr 2002, 8:57 PM
just to clarify, as it seems I've give a couple folks heart attacks: I know who shel silverstein is. I don't know the particular poem that you're "ripping off". :)
on For fun by Cha no Onna
17 Apr 2002, 7:31 PM
very cute. I don't know the silverstein you're referring to, so I don't know how much apology is necessary. :)
on Moon and Azalea by Aidaho
14 Apr 2002, 11:50 PM
very pretty. =)
on Quandries of a Summer-night's Green by Modulo
13 Apr 2002, 12:59 AM
get a tissue.
on Cosmic Imbalance by Modulo
13 Apr 2002, 12:58 AM
must! vote! six! =)
on Loneliness by Cha no Onna
13 Apr 2002, 12:57 AM
I think this has too many different images glommed into one for me, too much going on. rain == sky tears == sky is crying... tears are bleeding... so rain is rolling off the flowers... jeweled fishnet? a spider's web? outside the window. I think with all the extras tossed in, the meaning is less powerful.
on Ifni's birthday by Cha no Onna
12 Apr 2002, 11:25 PM
:rofl: hilarious! :)
haiku. :)
haiku. :)
on in love with jane doe by crin
12 Apr 2002, 5:22 PM
I like bits and pieces of this poem immensely, if those could just be picked out and put in a proper frame...
"Your eyes are the eeriest shade of pure pale green"
actually... I really *don't* like "your eyes are more beautiful than the universe" -- too simple, too easy, doesn't say anything. Then the next stanza seems to fumble and not really connect to the end of the poem.
The end (you're shattered glass ... if only I could be so luck) I like.
I just need a better understanding of the situation, the middle needs... otherness and explanation, for me.
"Your eyes are the eeriest shade of pure pale green"
actually... I really *don't* like "your eyes are more beautiful than the universe" -- too simple, too easy, doesn't say anything. Then the next stanza seems to fumble and not really connect to the end of the poem.
The end (you're shattered glass ... if only I could be so luck) I like.
I just need a better understanding of the situation, the middle needs... otherness and explanation, for me.
on High Speed College Life by Modulo
11 Apr 2002, 9:31 AM
definitely one of my favorites. :)
on Question of the day by PooP
7 Apr 2002, 3:24 PM
Pbtbtbtbtbbtbt.
on Gypsy by roses are read
6 Apr 2002, 8:08 PM
very pretty. As a poem, I'd like more substance/explanation of what's being described... as a song, well, I want to hear the music, but I almost can -- it's very pretty. very, very pretty. :)
on Have you ever heard of William Carlost Williams 24 by notule
5 Apr 2002, 11:15 PM
24 or 33? [confusion all around?]
on Impatience always backfires 913 by notule
5 Apr 2002, 11:15 PM
I liked some of the individual bits but not the sum of the pieces.
on Greeny nature by chigurukala
5 Apr 2002, 5:41 PM
I'm afraid I don't get this at all. Each of the lines I can take individually, and I suppose there's a single image presented, but the image doesn't do anything for me... I don't understand why I'm being presented the image, if I'm supposed to take meaning from it or enjoy it or... [I don't find beauty in it to enjoy...]
on Alone by roses are read
5 Apr 2002, 5:27 PM
I like the cage/ribs imagery, but the rhythm there throws me off.
I also don't really get what you're trying to show me... you're alone... but... I don't feel it. I have a vague sense that you've been to the beach... maybe you saw other people that were alone there, maybe you saw other people that weren't... but I really don't feel anything. Tell us more?
I also don't really get what you're trying to show me... you're alone... but... I don't feel it. I have a vague sense that you've been to the beach... maybe you saw other people that were alone there, maybe you saw other people that weren't... but I really don't feel anything. Tell us more?
please tell me it's not due to poemranker crashing. please?