on Window Washer (midtown) by ecargo
10 Jan 2006, 8:06 PM
mission accomplished- you made a mundane subject into a dance
on some deleted poem
10 Jan 2006, 8:13 PM
I can't tell if you are joking "like the sea you cannot sea"?
on [] by Prince of Void
9 Jan 2006, 7:32 PM
why not spell out p.o.v.- we had to scroll to the right anyway for the honking last line
on The Dark Days of Aristotle by somemorepoetry
9 Jan 2006, 7:26 PM
nice plot twist
on some deleted poem
9 Jan 2006, 7:29 PM
songlike. Seems you could tighten up some of the language.
on Uncontrolled scribblings one luch break by Nicholas Jones
9 Jan 2006, 7:36 PM
I didn't get this use of "retain"
False snow on an allotment to retain, perhaps
or to retain warmth
sorry for being so traditionalist, but the "+" and the date were eyesores
it was good in spite of all that.
False snow on an allotment to retain, perhaps
or to retain warmth
sorry for being so traditionalist, but the "+" and the date were eyesores
it was good in spite of all that.
on Suck by MacFrantic
10 Jan 2006, 8:16 PM
whose dirge- I got lost there- she is dead and therefore belied to your aliveness?
seems like you are forcing some words in here for the sake of your meter- the poor tulip boy has poor taste "that" he loves... (for?)(as?)that doesn't seem to be the right definitive article. Ignoring your meter, I would take out the "that" completely, then remove the "ands" in the 3rd and 4th lines.
with neither purse nor name (why so many articles?)
I like the dichotomy of him loving his plot, but being on a wage- puzzling.
with neither purse nor name (why so many articles?)
I like the dichotomy of him loving his plot, but being on a wage- puzzling.
on The chestnut by richa
10 Jan 2006, 8:30 PM
"Dates have become misaligned
or places"
I didn't get the "or places"
The rest is great.
or places"
I didn't get the "or places"
The rest is great.
on the light of a truly bright day by digipoet
10 Jan 2006, 8:31 PM
well done- we had one of those bright days today
on Settling in by INTRANSIT
15 Mar 2006, 2:38 PM
nice, how about spring though? "its" should replace "it's"
on Endless Battle by rahson_s
15 Mar 2006, 2:39 PM
I like the kind of manic feel of this, it makes it more convincing.
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2007, 6:02 PM
yes we do
on reptile by ThePariahDog
22 Aug 2007, 6:13 PM
Who gave this a zero and didn't comment? It is hard to work the word chitin into a poem! Nice mix of the literal and metaphoric: carpenter as god, carpenter ant, etc.
on beef flavored ramen by ThePariahDog
22 Aug 2007, 6:18 PM
mmm-mmm good
on some deleted poem
22 Aug 2007, 6:27 PM
justice?
in the stock market?
in the stock market?
on Church Propagation by Dovina
24 Aug 2007, 2:48 PM
I like the whole package, don't listen to the theist sheep.