replying on Memoirs II by http://mulberryfairy
31 Jul 2003, 6:40 PM
Yeah, I wouldn't have had to talk about the Neo-Nazi's if they hadn't come to Maine to try to recruit in a poor working class area that was voicing some anti-Somalian refugee sentiment (led by a press released "letter" (manifesto) to the Somalian community from Lewiston's loser of a mayor). This group called "The World Church of the Creator" reserved the armory building in Lewiston, Maine and widely announced their coming to town. Fortunately, the ringleader (who was to be the keynote speaker) got caught a week before the scheduled appearance for trying to put a hit out on a Black judge in Chicago and was arrested without bail. The rest of the recruiting group still came, but few Maine people showed up (about 30 angry young white men, like "forsakenbro", and probably 30 media, the National Guard (just in case), and about 300 counter-demonstrators). Anyway, I heard that they just spouted a bunch of anti-Semitic stuff, which isn't what the haters from Maine came to hear, being more anti-Somalian in orientation. It is sad how kids get the idea from the TV news that Black people are often violent. Just think of all of the white kids in Maine who've never known any Black people and whose only exposure is to Fox news and COPS, "that racist welfare hating crackhunt". That's why all I have are rabbit ears that recieve PBS.
replying on When Jesus Found Me by http://mulberryfairy
31 Jul 2003, 4:57 PM
Baby, that was years ago, I've cleaned up my act now. (I'll call you after the hubby goes to bed.)
replying on When Jesus Found Me by http://mulberryfairy
31 Jul 2003, 4:55 PM
Thanks, to be honest, I had no idea those were 2 different words, with different spellings, until this moment.
replying on Memoirs II by http://mulberryfairy
31 Jul 2003, 4:46 PM
Thanks for your comments. I am actually working on a series of memoirs about life with my daughter (the poet featured in this story), but they are all still in prosey poetry form. They feature glimpses of the beautiful things I have seen her say and do. She's at the perfect, inquisitive, fairness oriented age of 5 and a half that make her comments absolutely inspiring. Maybe, eventually, I could make it into a story, but I write "poetry" (which you've noticed is more like prose with decent storylines) because I don't have energy with a daughter and a social work job, to make short stories happen.
on Ah ha ah ha by -=Tan_Hand=-
31 Jul 2003, 9:48 AM
I don't think "the pussy was sorry" is enough of a description of what justified the narrator's slap. More detail, too loose, bad rhythm, too sloppy? Haven't you seen the rhyming bumper stickers? "There is not excuse for domestic abuse"
on My Last Plea by Inconceivable_Dreams
31 Jul 2003, 9:37 AM
The lines seem too short to be rhymed in an AABBCCDDEE... scheme. Maybe an ABAB CDCD would work better for these short phrases. Reading it made me think that if you read it aloud you'd be breathless by the first ending. I don't really know what the repetition of the poem adds, either.
on Border Crashing by JoyLuck
31 Jul 2003, 9:33 AM
"Wrapping can now be used to by migrants" typo there, and here "Ran over four foot women" (unless there were four of these "foot women", instead of a four foot woman). So the narrator is illegally immigrating into Mexico?
on Snake Oil: A Deadication by OneFingerAnswer
31 Jul 2003, 9:27 AM
I had a stalker ex-girlfriend once, too. It is hard to decide what to do about them, at least you made your decision and stuck to it. 9
on I, criminal by INTRANSIT
31 Jul 2003, 9:21 AM
Nice.
on Ethnic Smells by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
30 Jul 2003, 7:46 PM
Is this a cryptic message to your forsakenbro? I aspire to breathe and secrete garlic through my very pores with the best of the extra garlic hummus eaters of this earth.
on Vichyssoise, then murder by horus8
30 Jul 2003, 7:26 PM
Awesome. I like it all, but these lines " keep well refrigerated, yet awakening too.
If I can keep my temper down and your
tolerance high. The mess will be
worth cleaning up."
are perfect. 10
If I can keep my temper down and your
tolerance high. The mess will be
worth cleaning up."
are perfect. 10
on To You, In Warmer Climes by <~>
30 Jul 2003, 7:20 PM
This is so beautiful and exact, it reminds me to miss fall and winter in Maine even more. Who are these wimps who can't handle the cold? I say bring it on. This lousy "vacationland" sunshine is giving me seasonal affective disorder. 10
on The Longest Wait (Revised) by Caducus
30 Jul 2003, 7:04 PM
The rhythm seems very lyrical, whether intended or not, but then the quality is broken abruptly with these longer lines. Maybe I've been reading too much rhyming poetry. But the words and images are a great start, just seem to need a little rearranging.
on Too obvious by INTRANSIT
30 Jul 2003, 7:00 PM
Solidarity amongst pimples of all colors! Except for those big swollen red ones, those are untouchables.
replying on HATE by forsaken'sbigbro
30 Jul 2003, 6:51 PM
Sure it does. Did you follow me to this poem where no one had visited for over a week just to throw your brilliant comments at me? We've got to stop meeting like this! And I suppose you don't think it would benefit him to see how the movie played out (not to mention Ed Norton at his hottest moment)? Have you ever met any of these young people who have been targeted to join these hate cults? They are worse (and more devout) than AA members! Anyway, he directs his anger at Jewish people and has not mentioned people of color, so maybe he could be put to more constructive use in getting Palestine liberated from the Zionists.
on DJ Bling Bling spins authenticity by Jeremi B. Handrinos
29 Jul 2003, 7:35 PM
Nice job. Put an apostrophe in musics (music's). Aren't contractions allowed in Haiku?
on Sonnet for a Suicide by <~>
29 Jul 2003, 7:31 PM
I like how you showed the various emotions of a mother at a scene like this, her first reactions, to check on her own son and then worry about his shoes, both serious and trivial, were perfect.
on Cooking Class [Revised] by DreamerSupreme
29 Jul 2003, 7:18 PM
Too bad it was a vegetarian cooking class. Did you still get credit for the class? I became a vegetarian after going to a southern family reunion during which a whole pig was cooked and this, therefore brings back very nauseating vivid memories- "its grease slipping slowly like sweat" is such a perfect description, 9.
on HATE by forsaken'sbigbro
29 Jul 2003, 7:07 PM
I wonder too if there is hope for someone w/ so much hate. Sounds like a lonely life that you've captured here. Have you seen American History X? Sad story about how people take advantage of angry white young men and misdirect the anger that's built up in their lives due to having hard, crappy lives.