on The Sinners Saloon by SupremeDreamer
12 Sep 2003, 7:39 PM
Yes, I can see the source of your inspiration. I don't know about "sapless sinner"- I would think of your sinner more like a diabetic with an appetite for the sweet and decadent (but he/she would request the sour, for atonement purposes).
replying on maternal-infant bonding (rejection) by SupremeDreamer
12 Sep 2003, 6:32 PM
I thought you'd birthed some infants from your (pleasingly) tight ("straight") anus, hence the deformed heads.
replying on Armageddon (I Am Mr. America) by SupremeDreamer
12 Sep 2003, 6:25 PM
Yes, I quite agree that it is time for a different kind of judgment day poem. However, no thanks about the "communion" -I've been a vegetarian for more than 10 years- Jesus' rich meat might upset my stomach.
on maternal-infant bonding (rejection) by SupremeDreamer
12 Sep 2003, 10:59 AM
Nice. I loved "their mewlings". Interesting coming from you- did some research, did you?
on Style by Nicholas Jones
12 Sep 2003, 10:56 AM
enjoyable
on Lifestyles of the ripe and glamourless by horus8
12 Sep 2003, 10:42 AM
The comments were as good as the poem. Quite a storyteller, you are.
on Armageddon (I Am Mr. America) by SupremeDreamer
12 Sep 2003, 10:21 AM
Quite enjoyable.
on The Goodbye Hug by Amythest
9 Sep 2003, 6:47 PM
This sounds a lot like one of those email chain letters that my sentimental co-workers send me. Is that what you were going for? I am sure it'd be appreciated in that genre.
on How to sleep sitting up by Bachus
9 Sep 2003, 6:15 PM
That is great, but clean up the typos, especially if this is a serious tribute to someone.
on sick love by Nirvana13666
9 Sep 2003, 6:04 PM
Yikes. Hope this is fiction!
on Help The Aged by Mr Pig
8 Sep 2003, 6:34 PM
I have a poem about a 89 year old client of mine who lives in an assisted living home, but you did such a good job of showing us this place and telling a story that I dare not post mine. Excellent. 10
on A new beginning by hobojo
8 Sep 2003, 6:27 PM
Do you mean "whiskey"?
on An Offering to the Deity that is Me by razorgrin
8 Sep 2003, 6:22 PM
If you don't like it, pass it on down the table.
replying on Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy
8 Sep 2003, 6:17 PM
Good call, I didn't even notice until you said it. I will certainly, contemplatively, seriously and harshly take a reluctantly adversarial look at my adverb problem.
on Walking Home by EAger to Offend
8 Sep 2003, 10:40 AM
That was great. Well-written and descriptive. Loved the biblical allusions. Need an apostrophe in "township's rails" (6th stanza). 10
replying on Peach (Revision) by http://mulberryfairy
7 Sep 2003, 7:54 AM
So, I revised it a bit, but don't get your hopes up.
replying on Blind Faith by NNirvana13666
6 Sep 2003, 10:12 AM
Well I guess you're a better man than me, to consider it good in spite of completely disagreeing with the subject, but then, I'm not a man, and I wouldn't have liked that poem even if it had spouted atheist rhetoric.
replying on What's World Peace? by DeadtotheWorld
6 Sep 2003, 10:03 AM
It is not paranoia, it is called the US Patriot Act II.