on As the Redwood Ages by DurtKL
2 Sep 2003, 3:55 PM
I like this. Very nice
on The Kansas City Chiefs suck by Jeremi B. Handrinos
20 Aug 2003, 2:48 PM
haha, I like the second verse. I like both, but the second best.
on Some die waiting, or laugh forgetting by Shardik
20 Aug 2003, 1:29 PM
I like this one. The point is clear, the rthym fluid, and your personality shows through. Smart.
on Trailer Park: Diary of a Hayseed by DreamerSupreme
20 Aug 2003, 1:21 PM
I like it. Picturesque like pork loins being salted on your mobile patio.
on Iterated Fuck by nentwined
20 Aug 2003, 1:52 PM
Awesome. Just freaking Awesome.
on great caesar's ghost by bondjedi
2 Sep 2003, 3:47 PM
redundancy to fit in the framework of a haiku. I don't like it.
on some deleted poem
20 Aug 2003, 2:45 PM
not bad.
on (The vinyards of Tuscany) by Patsy
20 Aug 2003, 1:47 PM
hmmm
on Para Sa Aking Sinta by NewbieMe
2 Sep 2003, 3:48 PM
oooooooooh really
on Those Crazy's people in my brainsky by Shardik
20 Aug 2003, 1:41 PM
very very fluid.
on some deleted poem
2 Sep 2003, 3:43 PM
OMG martyr and you have worked harder. I didn't even read beyond that.
on The empty room by INTRANSIT
2 Sep 2003, 3:50 PM
hmmm
on Mississipi Murder by scitz
2 Sep 2003, 3:50 PM
Kind of good, kind of hard to read. I think you could revise this to something much better. Some of the ryme works and some of it is very hard to read. Good work for a first draft.
on Summer by MaliqaTara
2 Sep 2003, 3:53 PM
I almost wanted to stop half way through and call it cliche' but I read on and the ending closed it just fine. I still think there are a lot of cliche' references, but it has feeling, which is more important the mechanics anyway.
on Under a better bed wetter by Shardik
20 Aug 2003, 1:09 PM
I love this. It's disgusting and beautiful at the same time. Like life.
on some deleted poem
20 Aug 2003, 1:11 PM
uh...
on One Moment to the Other (v2) by nentwined
20 Aug 2003, 1:45 PM
I liked the first three paragraphs. The fourth one broke apart, I think. Maybe massage the second and forth line in the last paragraph?
on i will not come to bangladesh by lost in america
20 Aug 2003, 1:49 PM
wow. A man of words I am, but I only have one for you. Wow.
on some deleted poem
20 Aug 2003, 1:55 PM
Was this inspired by craigslist? hehe, I like it.