on some deleted poem
19 Jan 2003, 9:49 PM
Weird science shit is always enjoyable.
on some deleted poem
19 Jan 2003, 10:32 PM
Clean and poignant. the title could be stronger like Burnt rubber, or Profilactic re-enactment. nah, it's fine.
on Crystals In the snow by feathers68
17 Jan 2003, 6:33 PM
diamond typo.
on some deleted poem
17 Jan 2003, 1:27 AM
ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. cool. thanks.looks very promising.thanks.
on Disgusting Stickmen by Bobjim
17 Jan 2003, 6:48 PM
the best yet. it hardly palliates your condition though. here's a SWAGGER AWARD! ON THIS FINE DAY..OTAY!p
on some deleted poem
31 Jan 2003, 6:25 PM
"I may have submitted this already?" lose that...no one will care. This is great.
on alone baby by famenglory
21 Jan 2003, 8:04 PM
pure uranium, i here a ha singing take on me.
on Dr. Skellington by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
20 Jan 2003, 1:08 PM
"Who rang not the reception bellington.
The dead see him for aches and swellingtons.
With gnawed-off limbs instead of cash they pay;
More use for flesh than gold has Skellington.
And though he causes screams and yellingtons,
You get a lollipop for being brave!
Or possibly some caramellington!!"
you're right, except it's 76.8% vilanelle. which still cuts wood in my hood.
The dead see him for aches and swellingtons.
With gnawed-off limbs instead of cash they pay;
More use for flesh than gold has Skellington.
And though he causes screams and yellingtons,
You get a lollipop for being brave!
Or possibly some caramellington!!"
you're right, except it's 76.8% vilanelle. which still cuts wood in my hood.
on some deleted poem
19 Jan 2003, 9:43 PM
Doctor, doctor keep him alive. would work better with"".
who shot/ would look great with a has inbetween them, otherwise a lovely piece.
who shot/ would look great with a has inbetween them, otherwise a lovely piece.
on ocean mistake by Gordiansknot
19 Jan 2003, 9:31 PM
To prove i am here for the poetry. only.
Des, in all honesty, you're much better at spending money then writing poetry, but i'm sure you knew that, and it's no water of your back.
Even Muti's poetry is scorching better than this husk exoskeletoned denial.
I could edit it for you.
that is if you'd like.
Des, in all honesty, you're much better at spending money then writing poetry, but i'm sure you knew that, and it's no water of your back.
Even Muti's poetry is scorching better than this husk exoskeletoned denial.
I could edit it for you.
that is if you'd like.
on some deleted poem
17 Jan 2003, 9:13 PM
well, you are consistant. That is for sure.
on Bumper plagurising pack by Bobjim the II
17 Jan 2003, 6:40 PM
a tiresome journey that i've taking many times before. idolator.
on some deleted poem
17 Jan 2003, 1:39 PM
Poemranker must read. honestly, one of the best poems i have encountered here. truly a magical piece , and the moments it creates, and works through? spectacular.
on killer boredom butterfly (psychedelic) by nentwined
16 Jan 2003, 5:27 PM
this is totally bitchin bros, fuckin aye.<the warlock blast through a set of blistering songs on stage> tommy chong looks over at us above his left shoulder, or ws it right? any way...no matter because he says "you just ate thee most acid that i've ever seen anyone eat, man..uhhuhuh ha"..i like theee vilanelles. thanks.
on THe Missing Piece by redtearsc
16 Jan 2003, 5:41 PM
Couple typos here and there.
Odd way of sounding (the poem out).
Structure's sort of wobbly still.
Did you choose the simplicity of your words purposely?
Because it takes away from the sentiment i believe.
Therefore, you might option to re- edit this piece with a bigger dictionary if you catch my meaning.
overall though, not bad
I can relate to the situation.
And hopefully your honesty
That is unless it was all bullshit, but i doubt that..have a 6.
Odd way of sounding (the poem out).
Structure's sort of wobbly still.
Did you choose the simplicity of your words purposely?
Because it takes away from the sentiment i believe.
Therefore, you might option to re- edit this piece with a bigger dictionary if you catch my meaning.
overall though, not bad
I can relate to the situation.
And hopefully your honesty
That is unless it was all bullshit, but i doubt that..have a 6.
on Slow motion by INTRANSIT
2 Feb 2003, 8:25 PM
Have they named those microcosmed minature snow towns in the shake up see through glass globes yet?
I draw a bead from up high in my cliff side perch. The sun is sweltering and blasting my eyes cruel like. a little closer..damnit, as sweat is stinging my sore chapped lips... just a bit *crack* cha chink ba chink ker *ack*.
a confused horse with an empty saddle and a wilting and tumbling head of kale are all that's sadly left. my work is done here. i put my new 30 od self re-chirping kale gun with cell phone coimpatibility back in it'd photosynthetic recharger, mount my palfrey and depart into the crimson and burnt umber dipping orb(the sun) whilst whistling a sullen ballad nonetheless in G chirpe. another day, another bounty, and i'm none the wiser....dewwy ewewy ewe dew ewe ew. dew dew dewey dew dew dew dewey dew. that's just the big chirpe on my shoulders talking there people coupled by the experience of my clovered hooves.
a confused horse with an empty saddle and a wilting and tumbling head of kale are all that's sadly left. my work is done here. i put my new 30 od self re-chirping kale gun with cell phone coimpatibility back in it'd photosynthetic recharger, mount my palfrey and depart into the crimson and burnt umber dipping orb(the sun) whilst whistling a sullen ballad nonetheless in G chirpe. another day, another bounty, and i'm none the wiser....dewwy ewewy ewe dew ewe ew. dew dew dewey dew dew dew dewey dew. that's just the big chirpe on my shoulders talking there people coupled by the experience of my clovered hooves.
on some deleted poem
17 Jan 2003, 1:22 AM
i was busy here..let me take a look. talk to you tomorrow.