on The Bleeding Rose by BleedingRose
10 Nov 2003, 3:23 PM
Not too sure what to think, as this my first trip to this wonderful new world, I see the comments are as varied as the so called poets I have perused so far. this should be interesting. I like the idea you started with, but you seem to have lost the momentum before the end, needs a bit of polish, but overall, fairly well done.
on As I sit alone by baby_d
10 Nov 2003, 3:46 PM
Apostrophe misplaced. I think I see what you were trying to do here. Try again.
on Waste Of Time by Miggy
10 Nov 2003, 3:48 PM
Not a complete waste of time, you hit on a few good points. Your rhymes sounded a little forced at times, but all in all-not too shabby.
on some deleted poem
10 Nov 2003, 3:56 PM
A well thought out piece. I think you should continue it, I see now why it was in the top ranking. well done
on some deleted poem
10 Nov 2003, 4:00 PM
The aftertaste of this piece leaves me dry, I can't really tell you why. It simply seems out of context with itself. Probably just me and my twisted lethargic mind.I will still give a nine.
on some deleted poem
10 Nov 2003, 4:04 PM
This is the best poem on this site? Not that it's bad or anything, I am new here today, But I have seen at least one or two that struck me as more artistic and thought provoking than this piece. No offense meant to your skill Lydia
on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 4:16 PM
Very well done. Finally, a poet.I was wondering if I might find one here.
on paint me a poem with pictures by nentwined
10 Nov 2003, 5:05 PM
Picture me a poem with the paint of a mind,
give me a beauty that will last through time,
rhyme me a reason to forestall all doubt,
dribble me words to sustain me throughout.
Nothing major, it seems to flow better like this
give me a beauty that will last through time,
rhyme me a reason to forestall all doubt,
dribble me words to sustain me throughout.
Nothing major, it seems to flow better like this
on some deleted poem
10 Nov 2003, 5:13 PM
L7 not only looks short, it sounds short, Just doesn't seem to fit, it breaks the flow of the piece. By the way, I don't want to think about winter-this one almost made me shiver
on submission to decay by FreeFormFixation
10 Nov 2003, 5:17 PM
A good reminder of our mortality, the first line really set the tone, but it confuses my simple mind. Fragments of what skull? still, a well written piece.
on My First Love Proposal by ShaNoN+960317485
10 Nov 2003, 5:45 PM
The rhyme scheme seems to break apart at apparently random intervals. Perhaps intentionally? still, I like the morbidity, it appeals to me.
on some deleted poem
10 Nov 2003, 5:47 PM
If you were passing me to go downstairs no pardon needed. Thanks for the votes Mr. Magician
on some deleted poem
10 Nov 2003, 5:49 PM
I think I read this right. A shame.
on Giving up on Coke by Katzclear
10 Nov 2003, 5:53 PM
Soda gives you zits, try something else.