on Deluge by EAger to Offend
21 Jun 2004, 1:24 AM
Good, if voted *8*
on "She Phoned This Morning" by ARTIE
21 Jun 2004, 1:19 AM
Sounds too much like only the decent beginning of a more substantial poem. I appreciate the use of language. *7*
on Exist For You by WithoutLife
21 Jun 2004, 1:17 AM
not my genre exactly, but well done. *8*
on unbroken bottle by skaskowski
21 Jun 2004, 1:10 AM
"piss" kind of threw me off, and this is almost too close to prose for me, but impressive nonetheless. Great imagery and conveyance. *10*
on Center Of The Universe by Dovina
21 Jun 2004, 1:01 AM
Excellent, cruel, biting ending makes this work. Would've liked to see it split up though, and the last line should have a comma. *8*
replying on 0 by MacFrantic
19 Jun 2004, 8:42 AM
Thank you Deep Thought
replying on 0 by MacFrantic
18 Jun 2004, 11:33 AM
You tell me.
on 0 by MacFrantic
17 Jun 2004, 10:24 PM
First two comments from bad limerick
replying on With Reckless Abandon by MacFrantic
9 Jun 2004, 6:51 PM
Now, I wouldn't say gibberish, exactly. I used these terms metaphorically, which is ironic when the whole thing is a metaphor itself.
replying on With Reckless Abandon by MacFrantic
9 Jun 2004, 6:49 PM
I know! I was so proud of that!
on With Reckless Abandon by MacFrantic
9 Jun 2004, 3:13 PM
If god'swife is so keen on that little *2*, then I suggest that a reason be provided.
Anything below a 3 without so much as scant resonance of a rationale is total bullshit*
Anything below a 3 without so much as scant resonance of a rationale is total bullshit*
replying on Humpty Dumpty's Regrettable Fate by MacFrantic
26 May 2004, 9:06 AM
It's not a limerick:
AABBA
Just a rhyme:
ABCCB
But thanks a lot anyway
*CUAO*
It says,"see you around" Ha!
AABBA
Just a rhyme:
ABCCB
But thanks a lot anyway
*CUAO*
It says,"see you around" Ha!
replying on As You Are by MacFrantic
13 May 2004, 7:54 AM
Excuse me, it is you're not your, sorry for the inconvenience
replying on As You Are by MacFrantic
13 May 2004, 7:53 AM
Hey, DarK- ANGeL, I'm sure if he minded than he/she would tell me his/her self. Please, INTRANSIT, tell me if YOUR offended.
on Highschool in My Head by MacFrantic
12 May 2004, 5:05 PM
Sorry, Haiku(s)
on As You Are by MacFrantic
12 May 2004, 5:03 PM
Intransit, thank you.
on As You Are by MacFrantic
12 May 2004, 7:31 AM
First 4 comments are from a different poem.
on Beard my Homemade Negro Jesus (Improved! With AIDS!) by Everyone
5 May 2004, 4:56 PM
Yo kno thlat feelingg wen your lafghing so hrd its impsobble too ttype
replying on On the Discovery of High Noon and The Devil in a Glass Jar. by MacFrantic
5 May 2004, 11:46 AM
*jarred* means -put in a jar- I was simply going for the image of the devil demanding my soul from within a jar. Which reminds me.
"In England Smoky the Bear is not the forest fire prevention representative. They have Smacky the Frog.
It's just like a bear, but it's a frog. I think it's a better system, I think we should adopt it. Because bears
can be mean, but frogs are always cool. Never has there been a frog hopping toward me, and I thought
' man, I'd better play dead. Here comes that frog...' You never say here comes that frog in a nervous
manner. It's always optimistic. Hey here comes that frog, al-right. Maybe he'll come near me so I can
pet him, and stick him in a mayonnaise jar, with a stick and a leaf, to recreate what he's used to."
- Mitch Hedburg (Hilarious
"In England Smoky the Bear is not the forest fire prevention representative. They have Smacky the Frog.
It's just like a bear, but it's a frog. I think it's a better system, I think we should adopt it. Because bears
can be mean, but frogs are always cool. Never has there been a frog hopping toward me, and I thought
' man, I'd better play dead. Here comes that frog...' You never say here comes that frog in a nervous
manner. It's always optimistic. Hey here comes that frog, al-right. Maybe he'll come near me so I can
pet him, and stick him in a mayonnaise jar, with a stick and a leaf, to recreate what he's used to."
- Mitch Hedburg (Hilarious
on California triolets by zodiac
5 May 2004, 8:43 AM
I love subtlety and I find the use of semicolons to accent the meaning of the words a perfect fit.
Incredible imagery. *10* This is my favorite poem in a while.
Incredible imagery. *10* This is my favorite poem in a while.