replying on Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass
10 Oct 2002, 8:35 PM
I'll ask the Lord to send you more shit and AIDS. Now go make your mother proud. By the way, what's bukkake?
on the truth about poets by New Life Drug
10 Oct 2002, 7:10 PM
Are you really 13?
replying on Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass
10 Oct 2002, 7:00 PM
I'm so sorry Frass, it's surreal isn't it. Everythngs going to be o.k. I mean geez Death waits around every corner, but things have got to be insane over there right now. I was praying for you today. didn't know it was you personally, but I was praying for you. The thing is, your going to walk out of this with a keener appreciation. 7 out of 9. 7 out of 9.
on more{Porn*Star}{Hai*kus} by horus8
10 Oct 2002, 2:45 PM
Revolting, but in a good way. Why does porn make me queasy? Should there be parenthesis' around L2 in the 1st Haiku?
on Safe Distance, 10-10-02 by Frass
10 Oct 2002, 2:38 PM
Well, someones been doing their exercises. I love the way this piece looks, and also "pumping gas in Manassas" the last lines at the end of S1 & S2 should be eliminated. Lines 3,4, & 5 in S2 need tiobe re-worked slightly. S3 needs to be re-worked. Sounds like a hurried after-thought.
replying on The Thought Of It by Christof
10 Oct 2002, 8:05 AM
Who knows! We might all just be mice in a lab. Making the best of it is always a creative act. We are happy in our delision and that's all that matters. Actually as I have stated 1,000x's this site has done wonders for me. Glad to help.
on Walk in a dream (an ode to self help poems) by Bachus
10 Oct 2002, 8:00 AM
I braced myself for the punch, you were certain to deliver.
on The Thought Of It by Christof
10 Oct 2002, 7:50 AM
Oh my, what a difference that makes. Who'd a thunk it.
on Temptation Stings, Midday Nashville by <~>
10 Oct 2002, 7:46 AM
I can always count on you to make things interesting. You communicate emotion through concrete images, my favorite.
replying on The Thought Of It by Christof
10 Oct 2002, 7:34 AM
the question mark is a good idea.
on The Thought Of It by Christof
10 Oct 2002, 7:32 AM
"We were thinking of" you end the line on a preposition, and I my mind expects a new thought afterward.
on The Thought Of It by Christof
10 Oct 2002, 7:23 AM
lines 4,5, & 6 are confusing. The last image I believe would work better if you replaced 'Like' with 'All' the poor dear really is a prisoner.
replying on A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 9:52 PM
Your words are just so condescending. I realize now you don't mean them to be, but they truly are.
replying on A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 9:42 PM
She's innocent and needs your protection. you'll work hard for her and keep her safe from reality. She'll have your babies. Your the White Knight (ok, the Cafe con Leche Knight) and she's the damsel in distress. She is the purpose of your life, sounds very romantic but in reality it's a recipe for disaster.
replying on A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 9:32 PM
If she's that way now she probably always will be. I didn't think of innocence in that connotation. You're right it would spoil everything. The images you provide are just so classically machista. You live in a similar environment that I've struggled most my life to escape and then try to change. So I jumped on your ass. Keep fighting and listening.
replying on Trembling Worry by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 9:22 PM
the women in your poem are delegated the classic roles of either virgin(innocence) or whore. The men are either villians or heroes. She fullfills your fantasy of the perfect wife, why?
replying on A Soldier's Promise by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 9:16 PM
You worship her beauty and her innocence. That is objectifing. If she had lovers previous to you would that spoil everything? You specifically articulate your desire for her to have your children. What if she could not? What if she didn't want children? Would that change your feelings for her? Don't be afraid to let her mature and experience life. you workon finding out who you are, she works on finding out who she is and the all the while you offer each other a non-judgemental friendship.
replying on Dilemma of a Crip by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 9:08 PM
Nobody hates you, least of all me. It's very intense around here. But if you stick it out you'll learn a lot in a short space of time. You are already ahead of the game because you're opening up to dialogue.
replying on Trembling Worry by Ninoy_Instigator
9 Oct 2002, 9:03 PM
Absolutely relevant. They colonized your indegenous peoples, stripped them of their culture and forced them to adopt their twisted patriarchal oppressive system. Just like they did here in the Americas. That's my point. Like it or not your belief system and gender philosophies are heavily tainted with their bullshit. Women don't need your protection. They need your unconditional love and friendship.