on Rejuvenation by Dovina
10 Sep 2005, 4:47 AM
Where you went wrong was probably saying flowers only have one role. At least that's more than halfway through the poem this time.
on some deleted poem
11 Sep 2005, 8:41 AM
What does "Bad light boosts England chances" mean?
http://news.bbc.co.uk/sport1/hi/cricket/
http://news.bbc.co.uk/sport1/hi/cricket/
on Addendum to the Heartbreak by Miggy
11 Sep 2005, 9:42 AM
This is just one of your million other identical songs that you've Shift+F7'ed every word of. Newsflash: Big words don't make you not awful. -0-
PS-I'm thinking of naming my next band "Shut Up the Baby". Do you get it?
PS-I'm thinking of naming my next band "Shut Up the Baby". Do you get it?
on (e0)(af)(87e0) by nentwined
14 Sep 2005, 1:15 AM
Up to the last bit of the title, I thought this was going to be a poem about Battleship(tm) coordinates. Sadly, it wasn't.
on some deleted poem
16 Sep 2005, 3:09 AM
The best poem about compulsive masturbation I've read in a while. -10-
on some deleted poem
16 Sep 2005, 3:10 AM
God, you're spineless. I suppose you think you're heroic for that?
on some deleted poem
16 Sep 2005, 3:12 AM
At a guess, an adolescent martyr complex. Seriously. Don't worry, you'll grow up before you do yourself any real harm. If it's taking you a little longer than other people, that's just because you're a precious flower and require extra special packing.
on oh how far are we from wilderness by tianyi
16 Sep 2005, 2:35 AM
Great. And you've been reading Cannery Row, too. Extra points.
on "46 million babies a year" by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
22 Sep 2005, 12:19 AM
How did the Dumpling die? Did He squeeze it too hard? Did it just dry out?
on How Angels Smell by Dovina
29 Sep 2005, 5:25 AM
Utter drivel. Your poems have the power to make you, Dovina, personally, however far you think you're removed by narrative distance and metaphor from their content, look silly as you only could in real life by forgetting to wear pants to a 'Save Killer Asteroids' rally.
on The regrets made me voids by Prince of Void
29 Sep 2005, 5:54 AM
THE ROGUEFORT MADE ME VOID (Void) by I Like to Void
The Roguefort made me void
While saying (as I like to say) "void"
And getting cold
Cuts for a party at my friend Lloyd's.
As I say, I was getting cold
Cuts when this guy who resembled Freud
Came up with a cheese sampler tin -
I'm only human, though usually I try to avoid
Supermarket samples, owing to the hemorrhoids
I sustained as a result of steroid
Overuse while a roadie for the band Pink Floyd,
Though I'm currently unemployed.
But the hemorrhoids, as I say, are deployed
concentrically around the anal void
Roger Waters still occasionally comes
to plumb
As I mumble "void", and again "void",
As the others have tried so
The silence of void filled us over again
In hundred miles green and blue yards.
The Roguefort made me void
While saying (as I like to say) "void"
And getting cold
Cuts for a party at my friend Lloyd's.
As I say, I was getting cold
Cuts when this guy who resembled Freud
Came up with a cheese sampler tin -
I'm only human, though usually I try to avoid
Supermarket samples, owing to the hemorrhoids
I sustained as a result of steroid
Overuse while a roadie for the band Pink Floyd,
Though I'm currently unemployed.
But the hemorrhoids, as I say, are deployed
concentrically around the anal void
Roger Waters still occasionally comes
to plumb
As I mumble "void", and again "void",
As the others have tried so
The silence of void filled us over again
In hundred miles green and blue yards.
on some deleted poem
29 Sep 2005, 6:01 AM
"Clouds sweep across the sky in an ominous manner" would be great if you were writing opening stage notes for a Kull the Conqueror sequel.
on Sunrise On The Slag Heap by Caducus
29 Sep 2005, 6:04 AM
I'm left wondering, have you ever read your poems aloud? ... to people? I haven't in years. I wonder if that explains a lot.
on Electric Light by cyan9
29 Sep 2005, 6:14 AM
Most of this poem reminds me of a time I went to a DDR Nostalgia rave in Stuttgart while buzzed blind on gluwein. Ace.
on some deleted poem
29 Sep 2005, 5:31 AM
I'd like to say I helped you to this breakthrough, but I knew it was coming. Can we expect only META-self-loathing from now on?
on Without my Glasses by Niphredil
1 Oct 2005, 6:52 AM
VADA
His face hurts, and where is his glasses? He can't see without his glasses! Put his glasses on!
(Harry and Shelly are rapidly approaching Vada, Shelly takes hold of her and tries to pull her away)
Put on his glasses! He was gonna be an acrobat.
HARRY
He's gone sweetheart. He's gone!
VADA
Get away, get away!!
His face hurts, and where is his glasses? He can't see without his glasses! Put his glasses on!
(Harry and Shelly are rapidly approaching Vada, Shelly takes hold of her and tries to pull her away)
Put on his glasses! He was gonna be an acrobat.
HARRY
He's gone sweetheart. He's gone!
VADA
Get away, get away!!