on The Matrix by DespondentDotCom
22 Aug 2002, 3:31 PM
First, glad you called this one a freeform. Second, I'm enjoying your little film critique ditties, yes indeed, I like it. Third, I agree, The Matrix is a big gun wankathon for boys with little guns ; ) 7/10
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 3:21 PM
Without becoming overly literal here, I beg to differ. oops, looks like my dirty little secret's out... look what you've gone and made me do, god-woman-wife!!!
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 3:14 PM
This should clear things up: starfish is a cute little nickname for my... no, you're right DA, they should know what we know. But god-woman-wife, didn't I explain this to you already today?
on aphelion by DespondentDotCom
22 Aug 2002, 2:54 PM
Quit that cursed job and live again! Grow some balls and stop compromising, damn ye! Love the last bit. 7/10
on Hendrix by unknown
22 Aug 2002, 2:44 PM
I really do like the language, but at the same time feel it makes an enemy of the form. I especially like the ending, but I'm not quite loving it as a whole. 6/10
on haiku cycle 1 by mudskipper
22 Aug 2002, 2:39 PM
Very good, let's see some more. 7/10
on saving myself for marriage by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 2:36 PM
as long as it's not with your bad taco meat, beef-boy.
on The Precious Thing by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
22 Aug 2002, 11:25 AM
Hits all the right angles, and then dangles, just so. 7/10
No, Alexander, I didn't kill him (in the literal sense anyway). And thank you so much for your kind offer to wrap yourself in my legs. I will give it some thought. I've been glancing through your work, and will certainly rank/comment as time permits today - like what I see so far ; )
on Various 7-Eleven hold ups... by Bachus
22 Aug 2002, 9:27 AM
And dude, that is hilarious. 7/10
on Intense Irrational Realities by Venus
22 Aug 2002, 9:23 AM
Thanks Christof, glad you liked. And no, P&T, you most certainly cannot watch!
on IV (Deuteronomy's Lament) by coalcracker
21 Aug 2002, 8:08 PM
This is the funniest one I've read on this site! What happened to this guy? 7/10
Praise is fine and dandy, but when it comes from the likes of my favorite poets in this house - and there are really only 10 or so - I become oh so very tickled pink! Christof - thank you for the comparison(?) to one of my favorite poets, and for your concern that Venus could possibly be neglected. No man should neglect a goddess. Babbit - any feedback from you is appreciated, as you are most certainly a Poetry God. Thank you for your praise. Regarding the suggestion, I looked at again and found that I am much too attached to the ending to change it. Please try it again in a few days. wife god woman - thank you for summing it up nicely ;)
on I DON'T SMILE ANYMORE by longships
21 Aug 2002, 11:33 AM
Your work is wrenching. Have you read any of Don Paterson's work? Much different in style but similar themes. 8/10
on Highgate Cemetery by longships
21 Aug 2002, 11:25 AM
This piece reminds me of the time I wandered the Cimetiere du Montparnasse in Paris at 4am. Not the neglect, as it is very well kept, but the feelings of peace and beckoning you impart. 7/10 for evoking a great memory.
on Exquisite Explosion by Venus
20 Aug 2002, 12:55 PM
May I steal those? Always on the hunt for functioning alliterations, dontcha know.
on Our New Tongue by Christof
20 Aug 2002, 11:51 AM
Maybe best not to answer those calls. I know, easier said than done. Nice work. 8/10
on you scare me like the rollercoaster by silvertongueddevil
19 Aug 2002, 11:32 PM
This manic, rambling style carries your obesession themes especially well. 7/10