on some deleted poem
17 Apr 2004, 9:56 AM
I'm sorry, but this is prose with line-breaks.
on some deleted poem
17 Apr 2004, 10:02 AM
Better. 8
Now the mad ocean breaks his teeth on stone
Now the mad ocean breaks his teeth on stone
on some deleted poem
17 Apr 2004, 10:05 AM
I'm not sure why, but the word "penumbrally" doesen't seem to work in its place when the stress is shifted over to the secondary accent for rhyme's sake
on some deleted poem
17 Apr 2004, 10:27 AM
You're quite right about that there, angst is all it is. I don't claim that it is anything else.
What prepositions exactly?
What prepositions exactly?
on THE BEST POEM EVER!!!!!! by ?-Dave_Mysterious-?
17 Apr 2004, 11:31 AM
It's more fucked over than a whore at a bachelor party
on some deleted poem
17 Apr 2004, 1:55 PM
Maybe it's just me, or maybe I belong to a certain subset of readers that are just weird, or maybe what I'm about to say is actually a fair assessment.
This poem fails to make a single bit of sense.
But I'll give you a 5 for lunatic randomness
This poem fails to make a single bit of sense.
But I'll give you a 5 for lunatic randomness
on гоÑÑдаÑÑÑва by Wobble McFly
1 May 2004, 4:57 PM
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on гоÑÑдаÑÑÑва by Wobble McFly
1 May 2004, 5:23 PM
On second thought, I think I've seen this before. Or at least parts of it
on some deleted poem
1 May 2004, 5:26 PM
Il faut te dire que c'est bien traduit ainsi que tes propres poèmes sont bien éctrits.
on some deleted poem
4 May 2004, 3:50 AM
The motif of this poem is extremely gripping, good, and of course original. What's the village supposed to represent?
on The Conqueror Worm by zodiac
4 May 2004, 2:27 PM
I enjoy the first line especially. The moody internal M's throughout the piece make it feel somewhat surreal.
on The Conqueror Worm by zodiac
4 May 2004, 2:28 PM
However, I might add, it doesen't make a lot of sense; it doesen't have to though to be good.
on some deleted poem
6 May 2004, 5:52 PM
I like it, a bit whispy for my taste, but I still like it. Though "wreathed with flowers" has been said a tad too many times and since fallen into cliché. (Think of Poe "all wreathed in feathery fruits and flowers," Henry Lawson "London wreathed in flowers" and others)
If I could be further permitted to wax whimsical her, the last line reminds me of a line in a french poem by Beauchemin: "La grêle tombe en plaine été" (Hail falls in the middle of summer)
But all of this gives it a flavor of Deja Vu which seems in concord with the sentiments expressed. So you get another 9
If I could be further permitted to wax whimsical her, the last line reminds me of a line in a french poem by Beauchemin: "La grêle tombe en plaine été" (Hail falls in the middle of summer)
But all of this gives it a flavor of Deja Vu which seems in concord with the sentiments expressed. So you get another 9
on some deleted poem
6 May 2004, 5:58 PM
Well done!
I think it might be more musical to say "Sky aglitter, fast expanding"
I think it might be more musical to say "Sky aglitter, fast expanding"
on some deleted poem
6 May 2004, 6:02 PM
Talk about surprise endings. Yeesh
on some deleted poem
6 May 2004, 7:43 PM
This should be posted on some bulletin board as a specimen of absolute stupidity.
In other words, It sucks like a toothless whore
In other words, It sucks like a toothless whore
on To Who Ever Wrote That Roller Coaster Poem... by Fear of Garbage
6 May 2004, 7:52 PM
One third rediculous, one sixth pointless, and half-vivid.
You have therefore earned yourself a -7-
You have therefore earned yourself a -7-
on sunrise at kofa by unknown^user
8 May 2004, 12:38 PM
"When the lips again begin to flutter"
And "I became oblivious, and alone"
seem to have no meaning whatsoever. Their only purpous seems to be to force the lips to a sinuous surfeit of labial consonants in recitation.
And "I became oblivious, and alone"
seem to have no meaning whatsoever. Their only purpous seems to be to force the lips to a sinuous surfeit of labial consonants in recitation.
on This Summers Ablaze by DeadtotheWorld
9 May 2004, 2:06 PM
And use some rhymes that are more varied
on Outhouse by newagepoet2000
9 May 2004, 2:28 PM
You know this shit you have posted has a stench more vile than any that comes out of my own or anybody else's rectum.