on Obituary for the Moon by wilco
9 May 2004, 2:31 PM
Good song indeed. Unfortunately a song is not necessarily a poem, though it can be. This straddles the border between song and poem.
on 1 by Clockwork orange?
9 May 2004, 8:37 PM
Forced rhymes.
You can't cross an i
You can't cross an i
on THE MISSING HEART by Prince of Void
9 May 2004, 8:39 PM
Not a sonnet
No vote
No vote
on Cliche by Blue Magpie
9 May 2004, 8:40 PM
largess should be largesse
Very good
-9-
Very good
-9-
on Billy Bob Jo by Inconceivable_Dreams
9 May 2004, 8:42 PM
doesen't grab me
on Migrating Storks by Blue Magpie
9 May 2004, 8:43 PM
Ten!
Nuff said
Nuff said
on The folded ways your eyes cave by Shardik
9 May 2004, 8:46 PM
Jesus
on IRONSHOE by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
9 May 2004, 8:47 PM
Not a Villanelle
So no vote
So no vote
on Dr. Skellington by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.
9 May 2004, 8:47 PM
What the fuck
on Unmasking Wyverns by horus8
9 May 2004, 8:48 PM
Not bad
on The Errant Knight by Thyme
9 May 2004, 8:49 PM
Okay, I'm sorry but if you are younger than 300 years old this is slightly rediculous.
However, points for the form
However, points for the form
on some deleted poem
9 May 2004, 8:52 PM
Can we say Prosaic?
on Totally Hair by TanHand
9 May 2004, 8:55 PM
Rediculous and forced rhymes
on some deleted poem
9 May 2004, 8:57 PM
a satchel of shit
on some deleted poem
9 May 2004, 8:57 PM
Jesus
on Fighting before bed by zodiac
10 May 2004, 12:27 PM
A form all your own, elements of the interlocking Rubyat, the Terza Rima and so much else.
I have one solitary gripe: The penultimate line.
The rhyme (...and did forget...) seems forced here. "And forgot" seems more natural although I understand sacrificing sense to sound. An awkward construction with an auxillary verb instead of a smoothe preterite seems out of place here.
However that sole fault is not reason enough not to give you a -10-
I have one solitary gripe: The penultimate line.
The rhyme (...and did forget...) seems forced here. "And forgot" seems more natural although I understand sacrificing sense to sound. An awkward construction with an auxillary verb instead of a smoothe preterite seems out of place here.
However that sole fault is not reason enough not to give you a -10-
on A Word by cuddlytiger17
10 May 2004, 12:58 PM
I find this to be, through no fault of your own, entirely too much like entirely too many other poems on this subject to give it anything more than an 8
on Bracelets In A Box by cuddlytiger17
10 May 2004, 1:07 PM
Ann, you might want to try writing poems on a subject other than lost love. Teen romance is overdone by so many and in such a mediocre manner that it has become an automatic cliché.
I'm giving you fair warning: Many other people on this site will be very impolite in telling you what they think of poems like this.
I'm giving you fair warning: Many other people on this site will be very impolite in telling you what they think of poems like this.
on Its raining by caitydee
10 May 2004, 4:08 PM
A bit sappy but alright.
on Bodies Bore Like I Do Too by fevriere
10 May 2004, 4:11 PM
What?
Okay, after the 4th re-read I happened to get it.
Not bad
Okay, after the 4th re-read I happened to get it.
Not bad