on A prom that could never be by Eric Johnson
30 Sep 2002, 5:53 PM
I disagree with horus (what's new?). It flows well. This is my favorite of your pieces.
on A Guilty Bride's Demise by eldorado
30 Sep 2002, 5:28 PM
I get it. I think. Or do I? Oh well, I liked it anyway.
on First Impression by devotedwonder
24 Sep 2002, 11:45 AM
I like this one... cuz we've all been there.
on Black Heart by brazen
15 Sep 2002, 11:17 AM
Ok, I know nothing about painting, and apparently little more about writing, but I'm going to have to agree with brazen on this one. When you are writing fiction or a research artile, revision is great; essential, even. However, pieces such as this one are meant to tell a story of emotions - describing how you felt at the precise moment in which it was written. In my opinion, revising such works later can only serve to tell a different story; not to improve upon the first one.
on Pissing Rant by brazen
15 Sep 2002, 11:02 AM
Wow, that's... angry. But effective.
on 50 miles an hour by BEBO
14 Sep 2002, 10:17 PM
Nice lyric. Better than most crap you hear on the radio these days.
on Best Friends by ashtar
12 Sep 2002, 5:22 PM
Brutal. But good.
on The success of a relationship by april fool
12 Sep 2002, 5:12 PM
Me again. I really enjoy your writing. Profound yet humorous all at once.
on I heard it on the grapevine by april fool
12 Sep 2002, 5:06 PM
Haha. Cute.
on Bloody Lawyers by april fool
12 Sep 2002, 5:04 PM
That vote of one was just wrong. I enjoyed it.
on Eahtatiene by 1Sapphire1
11 Sep 2002, 1:17 PM
I disagree. Doesn't seem at all forced to me. I like.
on Simile by *Lyrisick*
11 Sep 2002, 6:40 AM
I agree with christof. I like the content, but standard English will work better for you. Nice job.
replying on Waking Up by PawnedTidal
10 Sep 2002, 8:59 AM
This isn't about parents, I am certainly no teen, and I think you are confusing angst with anger. Since when is being a little angry a bad thing? A zero, knowit? That's cold.
replying on I'm Sorry by PawnedTidal
9 Sep 2002, 8:31 PM
Thanks, Tarquin. This poem was one that came easier and more quickly than most I've written. Guess there's no motivation like the one that got away, huh?
on Diminishing by <~>
8 Sep 2002, 8:57 AM
Very well written. 8/10