Re: Granting Asylum by seanlb1	zodiac 65.161.41.48	24-May-04/4:16 AM
i put this on my favorites list another 10
Re: Staggering Lines Penetrating Eyes by seanlb1	zodiac 65.161.41.48	24-May-04/4:20 AM
"empty words are spoken empty words are heard nothing ever matters not even a picture of a bird" i know exactly how you feel... i have a picture of a bird on my bedroom door and sometimes i'm so deep in blackness i just cover it with a damp tow'l and scream in silence. another 10
Re: Silencing the Silenced by seanlb1	zodiac 65.161.41.48	24-May-04/4:21 AM
will you read some of my poems, thanks!
regarding some deleted poem...	edpeterson 68.79.27.79	24-May-04/6:04 AM
i have no clue
Re: Cicada Years by seanlb1	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	24-May-04/8:43 AM
Some nice angles in there, I find myself wondering what's it all about? A feel good poem well made.
Re: Silencing the Silenced by seanlb1	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	24-May-04/8:50 AM
Like the other; lots of idea, lots of emotion - screaming for distilation and a single goal.
Re: Lovely as a Lapland Night: Sort of a Sonnet by Nicholas Jones	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	24-May-04/8:46 AM
Interesting. Get rid of the "sort of..."; it's a sonnet. Anyone who argues that is lacking the expertise to be taken seriously. The [conjuction]: is a little distracting... what is it buying you for this cost?
Re: Only I wish I could say.. by PunkyPanda	PunkyPanda 65.125.114.157	24-May-04/10:01 AM
Yeah,this is about a friend and what I wish would have happened when I told him I liked him.
Re: Only I wish I could say.. by PunkyPanda	zodiac 152.18.130.224	24-May-04/10:50 AM
Oh my!
Re: am i on speaker phone? good~ by peaceseeker	thepinkbunnyofdoom 216.196.150.5	24-May-04/10:54 AM
too personal without any true depth. Just Emoting, and not even very strongly. Nice imagery but it feels like its coming from nowhere only to end up going nowhere. No suggestions, because I'm not really sure how you could make this better.
Re: Litany by zodiac	Fire_is_cool 65.100.213.166	24-May-04/3:03 PM
That is really good. It expresses emotion very well. It makes me glad that I am not the only person in this world to feel that way.
Re: Secada (Parody of sasha's lying vagina) by Bachus	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 194.222.223.239	24-May-04/4:00 PM
You missed a 'brown'. Otherwise this would have contained every single motif you've copied from -=Dark_Angel=- in the last 2 years.
Re: leavetaking by daniella	sliver 63.189.17.232	24-May-04/5:04 PM
Well said.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	24-May-04/5:45 PM
So, wha tis this revel ation? de pome wants to have it.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 64.161.177.233	24-May-04/7:37 PM
Very current.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dan garcia-Black 64.161.177.233	24-May-04/7:42 PM
A lot of butt in this one.
Re: the greatest moment that never existed by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Dan garcia-Black 64.161.177.233	24-May-04/7:54 PM
I've forgottn why this poem should bother me. It's something in my past or in my future but it isn't happening now. Maybe that's a good thing.
Re: and you by edwardo	sliver 63.190.81.32	24-May-04/9:07 PM
What?
Re: Cicada Years by seanlb1	<{Baba^Yaga}> 24.130.62.63	24-May-04/8:18 PM
A Shitaco with extra poonani 1!!!!
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.81.32	24-May-04/9:08 PM
Hmm...