regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.238.83	6-Apr-04/5:14 AM
I'm not sure surrounding words with -___- emphasises them. Rather it stops the poeme dead, as the reader attempts to figure out what you are doing.
Re: Alone by Deluxotron	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.86.113.159	6-Apr-04/5:24 AM
You sound like a real catch!!
Re: Diary by wilco	wilco 24.176.102.131	5-Apr-04/8:49 PM
This used to have a cool little off kilter structure but the poemranker submit box would'nt let me do it....stupid poemranker submit box.....
Re: Plastic Explosive Iraqi-Man by Enkidu	zodiac 67.240.155.82	5-Apr-04/9:14 PM
"The day after the end of the castless world" -- can you explain what this means?
Re: Plastic Explosive Iraqi-Man by Enkidu	Enkidu 198.81.26.15	5-Apr-04/9:21 PM
Sorry, castless should be cast-e-less. But the current meaning could be interpreted as if the world was devoid of people, or its "cast."
regarding some deleted poem...	nothingtoanyone 63.191.17.212	5-Apr-04/10:33 PM
Well, no I dont my father is not the best but I wouldnt wish to have a new one for he wouldnt be any better.What this meant to me was that maybe one day I would wake up to the father who was the man he once was and not the drugy he is.And every day is a drive with a stranger so I wouldnt feel bad if i had to take one.
Re: Diary by wilco	daveslady 140.211.124.224	6-Apr-04/12:09 AM
saw the original typed way, very cool man. The poem is a great to think about things
Re: Alone by Deluxotron	zodiac 67.240.155.241	6-Apr-04/4:33 AM
Hey, I wanted you to know I thought this was a really well-written lyric reminiscent of the ______ian ramblings of Mr _______ with some clever half-rhymes too, but it's my policy to give any poem which refers to suicide an automatic zero. The reason I do this is that have good reason to believe that ninety-nine percent of suicidals are just attention-grubbing whiners who think they're fucking Kurdnt Kobbayne or Sylvia Plath and that giving them pity, praise, or any kind of attention at all only encourages their self-aggrandizing gothic tendencies. You say, what the fuck do you know, you fucking asshole? or something along those lines. To which I say, I know more people who've successfully (and unsuccessfully) committed suicide than you, and I've gotten sick to death of it. Don't come barking up my tree on this, I have rabies. Good day.
Re: Poop! by dougsoderstrom	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	6-Apr-04/11:49 AM
please. go someplace else with this crap.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 32.103.153.67	6-Apr-04/10:25 AM
This provocative twist is a bit disgusting, but so is the movie. Too much truth here; think I'll look away.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.53	6-Apr-04/10:29 AM
I know what you are doing...
regarding some deleted poem...	wFraser Allonby Q.C.w 195.157.153.253	6-Apr-04/10:35 AM
http://www.visionsofjesuschrist.com/
Re: Plastic Explosive Iraqi-Man by Enkidu	some deleted user 32.103.153.67	6-Apr-04/10:45 AM
Have a 5 just because I don't know what you are talking about or how it relates to the title.
regarding some deleted poem...	fevriere 62.254.128.6	6-Apr-04/10:48 AM
Sadly, like Zodiac, I beklieve you could have cut the last four lines or so. "Windy sculptor" just doesn't sit. But otherwise the language is lively and engaging.
Re: Diary by wilco	some deleted user 32.103.153.67	6-Apr-04/10:54 AM
I find the Poemranker submit box, and most everything else about the site, very conducive to our craft, given http limitations. I'm with you on this right up to "compressed thoughts." It seems to be saying that journaling is a good thing, which many of us think it is. Second to living, it's quite satisfying.
Re: Escaper by fevriere	zodiac 152.30.44.208	6-Apr-04/10:59 AM
Foresake should be Forsake. I'm a little muddy on 'the polite case', but I'm sure you mean something by it. I would like to see you put a different punctuation after 'up' and eliminate the 'for' afterward. Though when I read it it sounds good. I find it reads better with a comma after faked and no 'and' before 'worn'. See what you think. 'At your heart, a poor gown' is the weakest line and should be re-written. The last lines are really strong arresting etc, but I wonder if there's a better word to put in the place of 'worth'. The form seems to work pretty well. You might consider putting some space in every couple of lines, though. I don't know, play around and see what you think.
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 32.103.153.67	6-Apr-04/11:00 AM
I like the former title better.
Re: Don't Cry, Sharon Tate by wilco	tre 147.9.40.233	6-Apr-04/12:12 PM
I love it, crazy story huh?
Re: The Girl With the Tye-Dyed Hair by wilco	tre 147.9.40.233	6-Apr-04/12:14 PM
u got some guts, again, a great poem
Re: Over you by tre	wilco 24.176.102.131	6-Apr-04/1:24 PM
Been there.