regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 172.175.160.57	16-Mar-04/10:42 AM
The emptiness is always there if you cannot find its source, no matter what you try to stuff into its voids, it will not vanish. Nice write WL.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.210.212	16-Mar-04/10:45 AM
Lines should not be so long that the reader forgets what word you are trying to rhyme. Use of the word crimson is a sin!
regarding some deleted poem...	some deleted user 172.175.160.57	16-Mar-04/10:48 AM
Personally, I do not feel that my lines are too long, they fit a pattern, and at least I used crimson instead of cliched red. But thanks anyhow.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	16-Mar-04/11:05 AM
So many prepositions, so little time. And about that, not sure of your capability having read only this, but I'm not won over by the duplicated descriptors: quite and calm veiled, hidden cream porcelain Less is more, especially regarding images of suicide or cutting - so much competition on the topic. I guess it could be about shaving though...
Re: What is the use of the lid? by A. Nomaly	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	16-Mar-04/12:01 PM
only one person I know ever uses the word "lacquered", but this has nothing to do with ass.... or does it...
Re: I think of you by singinkygal	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 163.1.146.114	16-Mar-04/2:06 PM
Great use of 'die' to rhyme with 'cry'!!!!!1111 -10-
Re: The Politics of Poetry.coms by <{Baba^Yaga}>	INTRANSIT 64.12.96.71	16-Mar-04/3:46 PM
Sadly, my epiphanys come in single penny doses. My most recent,-as long as you follow, he will lead you anywhere he damn well pleases,- came as a two-center. You have been blessed. Enjoy.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 207.5.211.177	16-Mar-04/6:08 PM
Nicely done, Richa.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.234.98	17-Mar-04/9:22 AM
We made our home like a hedgehog with wit. For the occasional jig a stain-glass motif dress kept up in the loft. A tin whistle for Andrea, (usually plain Andy). And a flag: Orange, green and white, to barter a jar from the bartender, a laugh. This St Patrick's
Re: The Benefits of Living in a House by Fear of Garbage	zodiac 152.30.11.107	17-Mar-04/10:46 AM
Great. Some of the lines seem a little overwrought or unnecessary: "They have not been touched for years;" "Nothing but death inhabits these walls," and (maybe) "I should be finally free from the presents of this place." And presents is presence. I think. I could just be extra un-ironic today.
Re: Fly by etherealmaiden	richa 81.178.234.98	17-Mar-04/11:14 AM
The rhythm of the the first verse I like. The other verses are too predictable however and the rhyme cower with power is absurdly forced.
Re: Wash Your Hands... by Blindpoetry	richa 81.178.234.98	17-Mar-04/11:16 AM
No particularly good lines, but the experimentation with style is interesting, and almost comes off.
Re: Buried pyramid by zodiac	Shuushin 147.154.235.51	17-Mar-04/2:32 PM
Nice details. It's good prose Zodiac - what's the translation?
regarding some deleted poem...	wilco 24.176.102.131	17-Mar-04/5:54 PM
I feel where you're coming from because the weather is completely erratic where I live. (Is it everywhere?)
regarding some deleted poem...	zodiac 152.30.44.39	17-Mar-04/5:59 PM
Would you consider changing the title to something like 'Goodbye, March' or just 'Goodbye' - since you're talking to March. By the way, nice talking to March there.
Re: Thank-you, outside by fevriere	zodiac 152.30.44.39	17-Mar-04/6:04 PM
"milliard"? Okay, here's the corny hi-i'm-new-to-poemranker review: I almost wish there was more story. What I get is: thank you, leaves, for listening to that terrible thing that just happened and not talking - more than something like: thank you leaves for listening as I'm talking right now, in this sentence, that I'm speaking, which ends right... here. But then I get no clue what they were listening to. Am I so wrong?
regarding some deleted poem...	<~> 64.252.21.22	17-Mar-04/9:33 PM
but february made me shiver. with every paper i'd deliver. and, if you sart it out, "Dear March, " don't you need to end it, "Love, X"? And, Sal, do not get sucked in by the promises of March, or even those of April. Wait for My. An d then, slow everythng down until you can hear the grass bending. I t still might snow in May; I have seen it. bring thisone around.
Re: Men & Forget me not's by Mona Lisa	richa 81.178.226.43	18-Mar-04/1:30 AM
Good, like the first verse especially. Sounds right, metaphor carried through. Don't really understand the final line though.
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.226.43	18-Mar-04/1:36 AM
Loses its way a bit with the longer verses in terms of rhythm, but overall this is really good. Especially the first two verses. Reminiscent of Auden's lyrical poems. Personally with something like this, I would stick to a rigid pattern of sounds from the first verse template.
regarding some deleted poem...	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	18-Mar-04/5:53 AM
Yes the Irish are a delighful set of gypsy, road tarmacing, incomprehensible, foul mouthed, alcholic, unkempt, US Funded, EU Funded, UK Funded, Catholic bigots. Their terrorist tenadancies are only bettered by the children of Islam as are their views on religous orthadoxy. All hail the glorious misrepresentation of the Irish engendered by the old US. And, they are to be congratulated, heartily, on a flag which contains green, white and orange.