Re: Junk by Bonehiss	devilishnutcase 65.156.178.70	6-Jan-04/11:19 PM
You lack balls ,but I must add fuck would be a better option for you.
Re: Sonnet Eighteen by devilishnutcase	nentwined 192.168.0.250	7-Jan-04/12:39 AM
what crack _are_ you smoking? or whose?
Re: BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	devilishnutcase 65.156.178.70	7-Jan-04/1:59 AM
Very captivating,you publish any books of sorts ?
Re: BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	Everyone 81.128.246.227	7-Jan-04/4:03 AM
When I read the title, I actually thought it might be about beaks. Needless to say I was jolly excited; but then it turned out that you just couldn't spell "break", and instead I had to read a poeme that contained the word "moment" far too many times. Thanks.
regarding some deleted poem...	sliver 63.190.81.96	6-Jan-04/8:12 PM
And now my simple mind will begin to attempt to comprehend, although I'm sure it's worthy of a ten, I will stay my voting hand 'till I truly understand.
Re: Faith by Pervy Elf	Pervy Elf 4.72.106.206	6-Jan-04/8:32 PM
Okay, first off, I'm not a guy. I'm most definately a girl...but that's not the point. I just want to clear some things up about this poem since everybody seems to be so up in arms about the damn thing. Let's make this clear, this is *just* a poem. What people may interpret from the contents is thier right, but do not berate them for it. Yes, I understand that at first glance I seem to be 'bashing' God. I never did that. The lines "Your God is a lie/Your God is a fake" are refering to that persons ideal of thier God. Contents of this poem are for those who feel that they must push thier beliefs onto others in an attempt to make thier logic appear concrete. It is quite illogical for an all-powerful being to be able to make our lives better just because we believe in him. From a logical standpoint, it doesn't make sense. Note, nowhere have I discredited God's existence or blatently ridiculed anybody for thier beliefs. Secondly, I never stated that I was molested as a child. If you happened to read my poem and discern that fact, then I am grateful that you may have been able to somehow relate to my poem. I appologize if I have misslead anyone. I am very saddened that this forum was not used as a place for *constructive* criticism for my poetry, but a place where others are subjected to malice for thier beliefs.
Re: Fuck by devilishnutcase	nentwined 192.168.0.250	6-Jan-04/10:46 PM
certainly a lot of fuck. repetition is annoying, forced rhymes hurt, painfully cliched, couldn't find any sort of flow or rhythm... this should be 'pimple poem' instead of 'free verse'. fuck?
Re: Dance in my Golden Shower by SupremeDreamer	JoyLuck 65.173.32.8	6-Jan-04/10:46 PM
May i quench my thirst with your gatorade?
Re: The Sun and the Moon by Princess_Snowflake	some deleted user 65.173.32.8	6-Jan-04/10:50 PM
The only problem I have is The complete lack of astronomical knowledge you have. We live in the age of the 'spirit' rover now honey. Screw the moon and the stars. Write about Uranus and Pluto and How they interact with my ass
Re: Fuck by devilishnutcase	some deleted user 65.173.32.8	6-Jan-04/10:51 PM
Fuck you for posting this Fuck carson daly Fuck my computer speakers
Re: Faith by Pervy Elf	JoyLuck 65.173.32.8	6-Jan-04/10:55 PM
I LOVE THIS POEM I LOVE THIS WEBSITE I HATE THE HUNGARIAN BARABIANS WHO HAD TAKEN ME HOSTAGE FOR MANY MONTHS!
Re: Why Daddy? by candaliesa	JoyLuck 65.173.32.8	6-Jan-04/10:57 PM
lovely the kindergarten ryhmes realy put me into the scene
regarding some deleted poem...	JoyLuck 65.173.32.8	6-Jan-04/10:58 PM
lol?
Re: Give me something by candaliesa	JoyLuck 65.173.32.8	6-Jan-04/10:59 PM
I give you 6* Too much "give me" repetition * just so you don't kill urself
Re: Give me something by candaliesa	JoyLuck 65.173.32.8	6-Jan-04/11:00 PM
But I won't Give you a knife
regarding some deleted poem...	DurtKL 65.173.32.8	6-Jan-04/11:02 PM
UGH! Such a Disgusting Retarded Poem! Stop WRITING!
Re: Dance in my Golden Shower by SupremeDreamer	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	7-Jan-04/7:58 AM
gross. having the spinach and the vitamin first was just plain evil.
Re: BreakBeat TimeTravel by nentwined	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	7-Jan-04/8:01 AM
I like how you suckered me into the rythm of it - but I could do without the last line.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	7-Jan-04/8:03 AM
Are you sure he sleeps with the fish??
Re: Last flight of a goose by Bobjim	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	7-Jan-04/8:04 AM
more.