Re: New Leaf by dragonfly	tuthaliash 63.198.141.118	2-Jan-04/10:15 AM
Interesting syntax in the first couple of lines...I found myself wanting more of it. Still, very nice...I haven't heard such a pleasant, concise description of the willing vulnerability of love in some time.
Re: New Leaf by dragonfly	richa 81.178.242.200	2-Jan-04/12:47 PM
Kind of pretty. Sight of him asleep is a bit worn though. And what has leaves got to do with anything. Good though.
Re: metaphorically speaking by somemorepoetry	richa 81.178.242.200	2-Jan-04/12:51 PM
Starts and ends with a nice clear voice, but gets a bit confusing in the middle
Re: The Fire of My Mind by RubyDragonKnight	richa 81.178.242.200	2-Jan-04/12:52 PM
Beta-blockers better still.
Re: Snowboarding, Sierra Nevada, 12/31/03 by Plaidypus	richa 81.178.242.200	2-Jan-04/12:53 PM
Well written, a bit of the 'science' sounds too much like pop cosmology though.
regarding some deleted poem...	Caducus 195.92.168.166	2-Jan-04/10:53 AM
yes yes and yes see my recent suggestion. also check this out: http://poetry.tetto.org/index.php?target=read&number=857
Re: metaphorically speaking by somemorepoetry	tuthaliash 63.198.141.118	2-Jan-04/12:00 PM
I get the feeling the message is opaque and personal (or maybe I'm just dense), but I like the imagery.
Re: Belabourin' Jack by middenHeap	titan69 62.31.29.33	2-Jan-04/12:27 PM
well that was just to long jack.but i liked it till i fell asleep...........
Re: Love Me Please by purplestain	titan69 62.31.29.33	2-Jan-04/12:36 PM
It must be a terrible nightare not to be loved. Wake up know your time has come.
Re: Belabourin' Jack by middenHeap	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.72	2-Jan-04/12:38 PM
Yup. That's the way the nut sac singes.
Re: O Death by lastobelus	INTRANSIT 152.163.252.72	2-Jan-04/12:41 PM
I hope this doesn't get missed. I'm gonna take a few reads before I vote.
Re: O Death by lastobelus	richa 81.178.242.200	2-Jan-04/12:43 PM
The parenthesesed part is pointless. And the poem is kind of messy. Other than that very good.
Re: A stitch by EAger to Offend	richa 81.178.242.200	2-Jan-04/12:55 PM
What about the opioids that null extreme pains when the pain is no longer adaptive?
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.242.200	2-Jan-04/12:59 PM
Rap was the first thing I thought. If you dont want it to be rap, slow it down some, use some longer lines etc. Bloodline, is more to do with heredity than the body I think, but I applaud the rhyming of non-common usage words.
Re: Belabourin' Jack by middenHeap	dragonfly 65.234.197.137	2-Jan-04/1:07 PM
Reading this made me cup my balls...I enjoyed it
Re: one true love (beta test) by crwncka1	crwncka1 66.141.118.164	2-Jan-04/1:20 PM
the past is always over, so now I look toward the future ! what a simple concept
regarding some deleted poem...	richa 81.178.242.200	2-Jan-04/1:49 PM
Not going to be an arse and post this again. Just to say the newq title is to be 'the lime walls' the other title was too political, and the poem too trite to explain a political problem. I've deleted my comment replies too, as I was being dragged into it myself.
Re: The wise by richa	richa 81.178.242.200	2-Jan-04/1:51 PM
Thanks for the comments on this, I may use part of it but the poem for me developed too much into a bit of a broadside against aging and the old, which was not meant.
Re: Petrarchan Sonnet about Love by emilyowey	tuthaliash 63.198.141.118	2-Jan-04/2:57 PM
Sometimes there is peace in giving up on love, and though rare, even happiness. Small technical quibble about the shortage of syllables in the 5th line, but a very beautiful poem making very good contemporary use of a venerable form. Incidentally, I cannot imagine who could in good conscience give this effort a "0".
Re: Green by tiamat	little_big_nose 216.207.133.122	2-Jan-04/5:31 PM
This is awsome, i really like it, you don't follow any 'rules' of poetry, which I love, good work