Too much like a fairy tale rewritten.

These dimensions do nothing for me.

Not too sure what to think, as this my first trip to this wonderful new world, I see the comments are as varied as the so called poets I have perused so far. this should be interesting. I like the idea you started with, but you seem to have lost the momentum before the end, needs a bit of polish, but overall, fairly well done.

Apostrophe misplaced. I think I see what you were trying to do here. Try again.

Not a complete waste of time, you hit on a few good points. Your rhymes sounded a little forced at times, but all in all-not too shabby.

A well thought out piece. I think you should continue it, I see now why it was in the top ranking. well done

The aftertaste of this piece leaves me dry, I can't really tell you why. It simply seems out of context with itself. Probably just me and my twisted lethargic mind.I will still give a nine.

This is the best poem on this site? Not that it's bad or anything, I am new here today, But I have seen at least one or two that struck me as more artistic and thought provoking than this piece. No offense meant to your skill Lydia

Very well done. Finally, a poet.I was wondering if I might find one here.

I'd swear I've heard this before, without the twist.

Picture me a poem with the paint of a mind, give me a beauty that will last through time, rhyme me a reason to forestall all doubt, dribble me words to sustain me throughout. Nothing major, it seems to flow better like this

L7 not only looks short, it sounds short, Just doesn't seem to fit, it breaks the flow of the piece. By the way, I don't want to think about winter-this one almost made me shiver

A good reminder of our mortality, the first line really set the tone, but it confuses my simple mind. Fragments of what skull? still, a well written piece.

Pardon me... I like this one. Good bump in the night. thump thump

The rhyme scheme seems to break apart at apparently random intervals. Perhaps intentionally? still, I like the morbidity, it appeals to me.

If you were passing me to go downstairs no pardon needed. Thanks for the votes Mr. Magician

I think I read this right. A shame.

Soda gives you zits, try something else.

you amuse me again, bobjim. thankee.

Dribble