Short and sweet...which is more than I can say for myself lately. 10.

I like this; simple, but really gets a rhythm.

Being terrible at art (me) and enjoying your style gives this a 9 for rhyme!

This feels very real, makes me envy the upbringing of your son. But why does every one of your poems have poop or pee in it?

Very Nice, spelling = Crystalise The last two stanzas are the weakest, I think the punctuation in them could do with a little work, but otherwise excellent.

Very interesting piece, nicely composed and expressed.

Ace use of "smiley" to rhyme with "glee" and "looney" to rhyme with "sea"!!!111

The best. :d

That first stanza is very powerful, I like the idea of knowing where the shadow would next fall as an illustation of knowing her. But I have to say that after a few more stanza of "I really know her" I felt the urge to start skimming; I think you might want to distill some of that into a smaller, stronger concoction. Once you have that, you can more easily develop that image of her preventing the fall - which is also pretty cool. So, I think there is a good concept here, the lines are a bit too dark here and there - worth pursuing though.

Despite the previous vote of ten, I really wasn't convinced until the last line - and really, if it was a poem of just that one line, I would be just as satisfied. this bit in particular: "Left me scraping our palette of lost love" gave me a little grimace. Dont' get me wrong though, I do really like the idea of the empty easel as it relates to a missing person, then the memory of him/her as the painting; that's really cool. Just thinking the palete related stuff feels awkward - complicates the composition of the poem ... (keep it to three things, one that contrasts with the other two, right?)

First off, and I haven't even read the thing - the physical look of it (the concreteness) is very appealing. Okay, gonna read it now... easy stuff first: consider "... by [the] poet's pen" (possessive pen). I realize you might have intentionally pluralized poets and referred to pen in a singular sense, but thats gonna be too complicated for most people. The general idea is well stated, and I think it buys you a "bye" on the slightly trite language in stanza three. I love the dipping cupped hands - fairly stunning. Tweak stanza three and you'll have a real winner.

typo police: dang s/b dank.

this best part: "to melt that cursed instrument and bury it in wet cement." is sadly buried in the rest of it - but your audience of one will likely appreciate the piece more. which is cool.

i don't get why this is so funny.

you have some desperate misspelling here, my friend. the one that stands out most glaringly is "the Pilot". at first, i thought you were writing a parody. but then i realized that you were referring to Pontius Pilate. there are some good ideas in here, but your long-winded discourse loses steam before it gets barely started.

Your mention of the shadow (as has been mentioned) is very effective, but for some reason, i wasn't as fond of your description of the eyes. It seemed too clicheed. Other than that, though, i liked it very much.

SHIT MAN!!! This is the shit. I've just done an ounce of Horlicks and three hob-nobs, and this just like blew my mind. I was like fucking spewing and stuff and chortling so much that my head literally exploded.

Yes!Egyptian Mythology! Although it's probably about something else! Yes!

'I curse my parents for sending me, To a respectable school.' Too true

You have neglected to mention the following important philosophical figures: a)Joseph Smith b)Aristotle c)Shang Tsung