well done

Wow, this one is more erotic than sensuality expressed to me, you pulled it off very well. I want a letter like that! whew

ola 3

you are the geatest. 10.

These ears can't hear you ~> Beautiful.

i love this 10

blue crush sucks my hawaiian cock. 3char1per

godly words. 3char1per 10.

I like the detachment (dissociation) when you say "watching your dad beat you"- but I didn't like it as much toward the end, I couldn't really believe that the narrator would be able to be so remorseless about his/her mother's death.

we are they the knights you say kni very good. check out my "queen of the rings" 3char1per

O.K. something is wrong here. I can smell it (distant smell of ether.) But still waiting for the continuation, only because I want to know what happened to the queer guy, you know sillygoose. I hope the spread his entrails across three continents, That would make this an interesting read.

Vivid-a great descriptive piece. The stanza "I can feel already/ your hands in my hair" didn't do a lot for me. Is that going to be the first place this person touches when the narrator steps off the plane? I want to know if this is an affair or a lifetime partner or boyfriend or what, but I am not sure knowing would make it better. On the stare[s] section, I would advise (take out "and the")"Mild turquoises of suburban/ pools stare upwards.

nice title

Suggestions for "plastic-ized"? I imagine it sounding like plastisized, but don't think it is a word, and taking out the "c" makes it seem unclear-er.

im sorry buckelberryferry this sucks shit. 3char1per 0.

excellete'(spanish accete') 10

silver think your a very inteligent poet. 10.

I'm not going to get into your Fabio comment line. A fairly discriptive piece. Not too shabby 8.

Well, what can I say. Hmm...She sounds really tasty, what with the socks, the skirt, etc. That alone deserves a 10.

you should see a shrink. your weird. why don't you just kick his ass. 8 for emo man 3char1per