The second line has to be the worst grasping for a rhyme I have seen in my life.

No good, but it's great fun.

A staggering wok of manure.

beauty.

really really like it, just a little wordy in some parts for me

mmmmmm. That was nice. You are a fine writer.

genius

oh man, I really like this one, I'll have to read more of yours

I think the stanzas are boring and forced. Too often content is sacrificed for the sake of a rhyme, as it is here. Many have searched, but all have failed - WRONG - I have not failed. Speak for yourself. No one can speak for "ALL"

How old are you? If you're like 12, this is a great poem. Good thoughts and I agree with your motivation for writing it, but it's painful. right fight right fight right fight right fight.

isn't life a fascinating mystery? I could sit here pondering the complexities of your deeply profound yet delightfully whimsical poeme all day. But if I did that, then I would be a total fucking moron. 9/10.

I can't believe this drivel persists whilst my own work goes unappreciated.

I did like some of it, but I agree, it was a bit wordy and I had trouble staying focused through the middle of it...too much going on.

A line break does not a comma necessitate.

I'd like it a hell of a lot more if the word 'Cum' never appeared. 'Come' I might forgive, but never 'cum'.

Geez, that was like Schindler's list on Zoloft. Complete forced fiction and ridiculously intentional pointless guilt trap crap. 6 My best friend has no skin, so what, who cares? Really? You? Go march for your guilt trip, because i could give a shit. There are so many more important issues occuring now adays that are more pressing then this shit. So 6.

And by know means is this anywhere near the best poem on poemranker. people just feel obligated to give it a high mark so that they won't be labled 'prejudice' you trite hack.

It seems dreadfully snarky to quote you something you once said to me, dear Tilde, but... "i'm awash in the imagery, but it's a tsunami".

hmmmmm

A work of staggering intellect. 10.