Probably one of the best Sonnets on Poemranker, and, as always, very intelligent and observant.

Childish, in every aspect.

Nice.

ok, heres your zero.

Blue ribbons here!

Nice as always. The lucky charms guy is getting married in september.

Hahaheha.

God's wife? When you return from your time with this vaudevillian, will you give some of your excellent critical feedback on "Sagadahoc to Hudson"? Other folks' feedback just doesn't cut it, and I think I have a good start, but it needs some work. It needs the healing touch of God's wife!

Nobody's noticed, (not that I'd expect you to) so I will have to give it away myself! This poem is named after southern Maine's women's contact football team "Maine Freeze". Oh, the power!

my pockets full of amt vials thats sure to arouse smiles as we druggie trip to saturn ill watch the swirl of colors frozen in a trance to learn how to comprehend chaotic visions of dancin purple men making wicked incisions into our skulls to then suck the liquid out a straw your soul seduced pretty lips wide open in awe as my rough fingers produced yellow lightin down your creamy thighs makin those lips breathe dreamy sighs hopin my exploration discovers pink tight lips that'll be sure to make ya buck your hips leavin you wantin more depite no erection, dont worry, thats what viagras for two gulps of rum to send them blue pills down my gullet and ill ram it hard so you'll feel it then at 2 am in the mornin, i ditch the motel we fucked in to continue explorin the wonderfull realm of chaos --- Heres my entry.. there, i got balls.. but like i said, i dont write songs lol..

I feel the love.

I hate late at night when your legs begin sweating and you're not even moving? I hate that kind of heat.

What happened between bandgeek and balding ass-squirt collector? 'Bandgeek' may have described 'you' earlier in your life, but no longer.

Good sonnet--love how the rhymes are not obvious because you didn't make the mistake of end-stopping each line. You seem to gain an extra beat in lines 5 and 9 (9 is easily fixed if you make it deep instead of deeper). How come you didn't rhyme the couplet? Re: Arkansas, I was only there once, backpacking--it's a beautiful state (they call it the Natural State), so if you like hiking, there are some great trails (both for dayhiking and extended treks). Other than that, I'm not sure. I think you'll find that Southerners are generally pretty friendly--that's been my experience, at least.

Love the Tommy and the use of "What's the deal with that" I Don't know enough about Haikus yet to really comment, but I'm going to learn!

You're right it was good. I was expecting something simple so didn't quite follow it the first time. Second read was much better had an understanding of everything that way. Thanks for suggesting and sharing.

I love this poem, because it's actually about you. It's real, not just some opinion or current event analysis. Reading this I recognize why 99.9% of the shit on here is shit, it lacks meaning. Nobody likes to got to the place they're from, or maybe they're just to stupid to know how. Saying that I think you should offer this poem as a stand alone and though I agree with you're editorial it detracts.

hurry up and hate me now :D

Like the 566

Here is your 9 again ---------------