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on some deleted poem
23 Apr 2003, 11:30 PM
brave and raw.
not as good as your other ones, at least in my opinion.
still not bad, and mostly better than mine.... bastard
beautiful...10
lines two and three are beautiful, but of course sad as well
you'll love this:
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Enfant terrible!
Is it wrong to love naughty children more than model children?
I am forced to change my vote once more as punishment. Though I know the spirit of this intervention will be lost on the likes of you.
wretched. since that's the point, i give you an 8. well done
vulgar and lazy.
I must be missing something. S-3 and the last sum it up for me. It's good. It's you. I just think you are capable of more.;)
drop the (s) from insomniac. Seems pretty beefy otherwise.
Drats! I love the beat. The seeming repetetive nature of the words kills me. Trim and blend, I would recommend.
Do all of these shows. together.
I feel I must make Blade's case, (God rest his soul), as his was always a piss-take view. He was never serious and not blatently offensive or insulting, merely irritating. I think if anyone should be 'got-at' its Bobjim. (Bobjim, its just boring now with the paedophilia crap. Stop it, stop it now!) Poor Blade, such a warm man, such a tender man, such a wonderful lover...
there are so many things i like about this:
that the betrayal is necessary.
that death pales in comparison to the damage here done.
the cruelty in S2. and the humor.
the violent hand and needy tongue.
dark eye. thumbed rules.
riding to the hills, to run, instead of running to the hills, to hide.
that THE dog is not "my" dog.
the enormity of geography.
the only weak spot i see is this:
"But somehow, somehow
They are not enough."
you are rationalizing here. so i will deduct one point, lest the gods think it perfect.
I like the theme. BTW hurst = hearse. Only reason for semi-low score was that im not too big a fan of the "every-line-ryhmes-with-the-next" format.
Insanity is abandoning the same place the sane man is standing. This diagnosis is handing a prior notion demanding we all have an equal understanding. This is why we see people landing all over the spectrum of sane to insane, and it's no true reflection cause a brain is a brain. But somehow that's no exception. we're expected to reach perfection
O if only I could be a Yagarinos, so that I may assume the position that you currently hold later in my life!! *bong noises*
Don't ever stop reaching.....