Yardbird
on some deleted poem
13 Apr 2003, 1:03 PM
10 - One of your best so far! This is rather damn cool!
A BUFFY FAN HUH.
YES 8
VERY GOOD,I LIKED IT 9
FISH OCTOPUS
VEGETABLE PANCAKE ROLL
LAMB BURGER IN A BUN
COLESLW AND TOSSED SALAD
CHUBBY BUM CHEEKS ARE REAL SEXY
THIS TIME LAST YEAR,IT'S LIKELY YOU HADN'T HEARD OF GARETT S. BUT AFTER THIS ENGLISH STUDMUFFIN GOT HOT WITH THE WORLD IN A PHONE BOOTH,THE SCHUMACHERS TOOK NOTE
REMEMBERING STU SHEPARD.I PICKED UP THAT RINGING PAYPHONE,THE CALLER TOLD ME THAT HE'S GOT A GUN TRAINED ON MY HEAD I'LL DIE IF ,I HANG UP.
PLAYED OUT IN REAL TIME .I HUNG UP AND FOR ME LIKE THIS POEM ,YOU KNOW
Nice use of contemporary language, not enough of this on poem ranker.
This is a poem i can jump straight into
-8-
'alas now i am dying beyond my means' sticks out grabs me immediately.
Quite cool, really. Very professional-style stuff - 9.
It's not getting any better for you, is it? 0.
0. Don't give up the day job...
Bollocks. Utter bollocks. 0.
Dear God! How shite are you? 0.
More quality stuff - I'm impressed, though it would be nice to see you write about something else than sex... Also, I hope the 'movies' part of the title isn't anyting other than a metaphor - I've seen people get arrested for less..... :) Anyway, here's a 9 'cos I'm nice like that, and try to get a good, clean, wholesome hobby like lacrosse....
Pretentious twaddle. Giving you a nought seems like generosity...
Absolute shit - 0.
ha
i bought my tickets online, so i didn't get to use the student discount...how screwed up life is
A BUFFY FAN HUH.