That is fucking delightful! Not only a wonderful parody, but gets me right where I love exotic infectious diseases. plagues make me feel all funny inside. I will send a bevy of charming unifected strippers to your home in thanks.10

Its me!!! As my friends will attest to.

vilanelles are difficult to master this flows well No mean feat

something about it touches me alhtough i can't really tell whut.

Ok bro, I'll try not to steer you wrong. S-1 line 2 is unnecessary, see line 1. (would) I be enlightened. S-2 lines 5/6 repeat 3/4 LIne 8 work into the last stanza lines 10 and 12 could merge, lose line 11 S-3 you could use "spitfires" to exclaim his response. the other plane is missing an (r) (I preferred Stukas, myself) drop the (but(s) A river waiting for a mudslide makes no sense (to me) and I'm unsure about the russian doll(my naivete prob.) Any way, hope that helps. Oh,also, All the thoughts are there, but they could stand some organizing. Best I can do for a piece so powerful. b.o.l. Rich

i loved the way that you seem to ask her something(if i touch you,could i be enlightened) but matter of fact is you are more of asking your self,i liked the way you are trying to kill the ghost of you father who is trying to keep you away of the light you are searching for. "there is no shame in holding myself" this sounds like you are tring to convince yourself.i give it 10,awesome work.

this is one nice romantic poem and by the way you don't need to concentrate much on the rhyming of the poem,many of good poems don't rhyme,modern poetry doens't stand on rhyming so just feel like fre to write don't limit yourself with a usuage of words. i give this 6,pretty good work

"Mum would find company in loneliness" "Everything looks perfect in a Silver frame" "The King of bastard pawns ashamed of his crown" i liked these most of all,each one made a vision itself.i give this 9

isnt that a bruce lee movie? didnt jackie chan rip it off?

the last 3 stanzas are realy what makes this poem,and i liked using the (I remember) at the begining of a new line.i give it 7

For some reason, I've always been making SARS rhyme with arse. But it works said like that too.

Great concept and very good poem (9); but, present yourself in the best light and spell it right, MP.

Now that I know a little more, this smokes!!!!!

Nice, cant pick any faults Maybe a bit short I think a killer line might make this poem, I hope you find one

All I can say is... strange. It does have a certain something to it.

Dude, I thought Zzin was a chick. This conflicts with MY zzinnia fic. grr.

awesome, awesome, awesome. talent you hold with the greatest regards. dr.

nice but i was not feeling it.

in other words, I love you.

and people accuse me of posting thinly.