razorgrin
on hard as a rock by <~>
13 Mar 2003, 2:34 PM
brilliant, as usual.
luscious and lascivious. I read it in all the wrong ways (I know a little bit about those Mayans)
I'M SPEECHLESS, THIS IS FUCKING AWESOME, AND YEAH GODS BORING BRING ON THE EVIL MEISTER.
God your horny tonight, ice the red I'm coming over.
SUCH A POSH NAME FOR A HARLOT DONT YOU THINK?
SALACIOUS, YOU DISGUST ME AND I WANT YOU BABY
Icarus flies like an irish kite. Glad to see non conformity, anorak poetry fucks me off occasionally infact conformist is icarus poetry, down with it.
Sounds like the ocean, love it !
By the way that Saturn ring thing you wrote for your wife....it partly inspired me to write one i posted today, like your true comment...'bloody war of angels',
think you need to work on last line, its okay but you dont do okay you do bravo. 7
Long enough to hold my attention, needs more humour thats what the title promised me but then i am pissed.
Perfect after so many rewrites you deserve this 10.
Lets get you top, I'd love that because you dont care for votes but tough heres mine===========10!
i really liked this, the imagery is fantastic
ARE YOU WEARING THE HORN-ED HAT, VALKYRIE????
Fun.
reminds me of the four wives in the movie "raise the red lantern". Very good.
pheh. Scars=drama-queen cries for attention. I have legs the same measurements as Bettie Page's and an ass that could have its own religion. Can't sympathize, sorry. Maybe massive plastic sugery will alleviate your pain?
this cries to me for more of a beat:
Women are pearls that you string,
Slid one to another with a satisfying "plink."
Each purchased alone, momentarily shone
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and so on.
somehow it makes it more vindictive for me that way. like you are ramming the words home, with each hard beat.
yay wonderfully good i love it
SUPERKOOL
SWALLOWED BY ARIEL WOULD BE BETTER BUT COMING FROM THE POET WHO WROTE CURRY GIVES YOU THE SHITS, I'LL LET IT GO HERES A 7