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on some deleted poem
13 Feb 2003, 8:21 AM
better than a booming crappie ass. of course, you could always use dynamite. my friend joe can get you some.
Heres a 9 its pretty good yo, but tell me, did you eat all the pies? is that why your a spit roaster?
do i know you?
thank you for the haiku.
Chased (2) + by (1)+ Pavlov's (2) + dog (1) = 6
Very nice indeed! 9
When (1) + man(1) + uses(2) + a(1) + flame(1)= 6. (a)You can't count, assmachine. (b)Dumb statement worthy only of "proverbs for dummies" books. (c)Poorly written, overall. Therefore, a zero.
Chirpe, indeede. Trying to be meaningful and deep, but comes out like a puddle of hedgehog piss. Fail.
Milk is gross.
Childish rhyme scheme, boring mssage. Did you keep repeating "poet" so much to convince yourself that you actually are one? Man, I'm glad I don't have to worry about a poet's cusre. Oh, The Pain (tm) of onefingeruphiass's Deep Inexpressible Feelings(tm)!
this had potential until the use of 'bod' to rhyme with "god". I had to take a break to finish giggling.
I certainly don't dispute that statement.
i wondered about the cat hiding in the branches, and found this strangely parallel universe, where yggdrasil is not a tree, but an institute that researches uranium:
http://www.earthisland.org/yggdrasil/uep
Kind of all over the place. The lines "hurl lettuces
And fairies
They cast a spell at me" cracked me up, though.
how can ilisten when i am so caught up in looking at his face? he moves it.
you taught me a new word. and i like how you used it: anamnesis.
also, "Without so much as a by your leave" is strikingly protective and tender, used here. niely done.
Show your nobility Mr Pig you are stressing ZZinnia out, tell her who you are, she is not your pink little muppet, why the dedication?
I like the 3,7,6... but we all know that gazelles and cheetah are poor examples to show the extremne contours of evolution mr. pige... perhaps you'd have better luck using penises and volcanoes, or sink holes and vulvas.
This thing made me think of the song "Obey the Cow God" by green jelly. but the poeme rocked less.
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