Re: Crappy by drnick	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.220.187	17-Oct-06/6:57 AM
Puerile. Unamusing. Not witty. Not clever. Badly punctuated. And those are some of the better aspects.
Re: Israel (Through The Eyes Of One Jewish Soul) by slana5	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.220.187	17-Oct-06/6:59 AM
ISRAEL Land of broken promises Land stolen from the Palestians Land of liars, crooks and murderers Land supported by the Yanks Land hopefully to disappear from the map
Re: Israel (Through The Eyes Of One Jewish Soul) by slana5	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.220.187	17-Oct-06/7:01 AM
This poem has been posted twice. This copy is just as applalling as the first posting. Sickening. Israel is a rogue usurping state, hated by all except the Americans.
Re: Crappy by drnick	Shuushin 63.167.136.250	17-Oct-06/7:24 AM
It isn't really clear what this is about (in the poem - the commented reference makes it, if not meaningless, inconsequential). rain sliding down the window is approximately as primitive as one can get when describing rain sliding down a window.
Re: Work by half.italian	Dovina 70.38.78.229	17-Oct-06/12:56 PM
"Loophole" is one word. A bit wordy: "This time I watched a movie that reminded me of life It woke me from boredom" could be "A movie woke me from boredom."
Re: Pope Benedict And The Limbo Problem by Edna Sweetlove	Dovina 70.38.78.229	17-Oct-06/12:58 PM
Already a 10! It will soon work "its" way to the best list.
Re: Your Eyes by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	17-Oct-06/3:07 PM
Nice
Re: Your Eyes by Dovina	some deleted user 171.69.144.146	17-Oct-06/6:59 PM
sweet !
Re: Your Eyes by Dovina	drnick 24.176.22.254	17-Oct-06/8:45 PM
This seems quite different from what you normally write, but I definately like it!
Re: Your Eyes by Dovina	half.italian 70.36.242.152	18-Oct-06/2:45 AM
Great poem. It flows incredibly well for me until the last line. At first read I thought the reference to self bothered me, but now I'm not so sure. It just doesn't seem to fit with the rest. Honestly, I don't understand (as other posters mention) how your work varies in quality so much. Farewell Kind Lover was another diamond, but most of the stuff in between I haven't liked very much. Anyway, this is great.
Re: One Nation Under God by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/12:57 PM
This is truly, sickeningly, repellently awful. One nation under God? Are you crazy? America is a racial mish-mash, a mixture of demented bible-thumping creationist Christians, aggressive psychopathic ill-educated redneck patriots and sentimental sloppy hypocrites. And those are the better Americans!
Re: PURPLE COWS by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/12:58 PM
About as funny as the last outbreak of the Black Death.
Re: Fifty if Nifty by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:00 PM
This will make 'em roll in the aisles down at your local tabernacle.
Re: Waiting for the Doctor by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:01 PM
Brilliant rhyme scheme. 0/10 and count yourself lucky I'm feeling generous.
Re: Let's Do a Test by GAC	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:01 PM
not so gooding? You must have been desperate for a rhyme, dearie. 0/10 again.
Re: Let's Grovel For Jesus And Fight The Naughty Satan! by Sing4Jesus!	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:03 PM
Howlingly funny! I love this!
Re: Young Dead Flesh by Harry Hunt	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:05 PM
Quite amusing But confusing
Re: snot by fattony	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:08 PM
This showed considerable promise until that 4th line. I suggest the last line should read: "in the matted nose hairs i clipped so short" And you spell nostril with an "i", dearie.
Re: Pump the Guns by oddgreenout	Edna Sweetlove 85.210.230.102	18-Oct-06/1:09 PM
tripe
Re: 11th September (a senyru) by scitz	daniella 200.127.64.189	19-Oct-06/4:11 AM
9/11 was an inside job. connect all the mind boggling dots at: www.loosechange911.com/index_main.html wake up america