Excellent. How can this not get 10s across the board? This must have taken ages to write but its well worth it.

Really enjoyed that. thanks

No.

your verbal acoustic is well tuned, i give 7/10 because it flows with lament thicker than plasma, check mine out i'm a virgin writer on this site

Good stuff, Maria! It flows a lot better than your earlier work, and I think that restricting the length has helped to make your ideas more concise. Overall, nicely done - your poetry just keeps getting better and better! 8 :)

Some really good similies in there. Clever.

Really good.....but cuddlebunnies???

The use of the word 'lychees' deserves a 10 alone

you're kidding, right?

You are a visionary for our future, a pretty pathetic future but hey!

this bit is just not working for you settle. sorry. no poontang for you.

This poem is effin great. Plus the fact it has a strong basis in reality captures it for me. Freddy you are greatness.

my god, man! get your meds adjusted for the sake of all that is sacred and profane!

funny. (but wrong rhyme scheme to be a limerick.)

I am one of the random people arguing on this page, I just though I would let you know, since I am using this page, that your poem is seriously crap!!

Could be improved, okay as it is obviously from the heart

I think this is really good and I feel that it has been really thought out. The reader gets quite a degree of sympathy towards the end I think.

Our styles are similar. In depth about a shallow love, nice one dude

Shouldn't it be "A little bit of something, each and every day, will help sooth the pains, of items on e-bay" ( you left out the of )and um...this is just something you threw together wasn't it...It ryhemes yes, but it's not...poetic, lol.

cancel time--very nice.