oh the irony, could cause offense but I like it, it's really good well done

This poeme is good, but I would change the title to "WTF?!?!"

Because it's a motherfucking bumblebee, that's why. What the hell is wrong with you?

i never waffle when i wear my gowne of sorrow. perhaps i am wronged to do so.

Very poetic, great rythm, though...odd, to say the least. (10!)

'why the Browne Winds blew' or 'God goes not at all with wine!'...hard to say which i favor more. both are sheer revelation. bravo. encore.

Hot poem! Thank goodness I built that fire pit!??

Fantastic metaphor. I'll never drink tea again! Love your style, by the way.

Bit confused on this one here, but good job anyway. I'm sure there's some deep hidden meaning behind it, right? (hehe)

Why a waffle? (10)

Great narrative drive. Rhyme structure primitive, but inventive and witty language - "Perhaps it worked; perhaps 'twas luck. In truth, I do not give a fucke." or "So, just like her in Paradise, Who, also nude, and prone to vice, Did gorge herself on wicked fruit And shew her shameful birthday suit" to name two personal favourites - but really the memorable lines are too many to quote here. But perhaps most compelling is the tremendous moral message: so much modern verse gives us no more than pallid whining about love. Dark Angel really gets to grips with the big issues. So to speak. And the ending is worthy of Poe, though let down a trifle by the final 'Nooooo' which adds an incongruously Simpsonesque note. Dark Angel's work is becoming increasingly mature; this reviewer looks forward to his next, even riper, offering.

an army of thinkers. easier said than done, but it is a good fight, and i am fighting it, as are you. you just can't let on that you're after their soul right away, or that you're speaking (poetry) (shhh!!!). people are scared of poetry because they think it is beyond them. pshaw!

i like what you are trying to say, but you are not communicating it effectively

such sorrow in your words... good read vulcan :o)

All three are quite enjoyable. You like bees, and honey. Sounds like you like women. You have humor, very important. Thanks for the laugh,welcome,enjoy!888

Let the rats run their race and enjoy your view from the top!

I agree with this write on many aspects... many times I've been given comments that told me that I should give up, because I lack any ability to write... but there are some who try to help... to help make me a better writer rather than say "give up". It's better to try to help someone rather than hurt them. A philosophy I try to live by and I'm glad to see others do the same...

are there 12 of them, and does mr pitt make the occasional cameo?

Good job; nice steady rythm!

hillarious! loved it!