<{Baba^Yaga}>
on some deleted poem
10 Oct 2002, 1:28 PM
who longs to be, might work better. but i'll give you a one for plunging. ha.1. a tapur might also work better.
neato. pretty damn neato. 6.
fun dip candy packets w/two vanilla sticks. cure all.
haha. this is pure third legging the hula hoop. you fail. miserably. ha.lol! 0.
christof, you are honed razor sharp these days. i bled, reading this.
Well, someones been doing their exercises. I love the way this piece looks, and also "pumping gas in Manassas" the last lines at the end of S1 & S2 should be eliminated. Lines 3,4, & 5 in S2 need tiobe re-worked slightly. S3 needs to be re-worked. Sounds like a hurried after-thought.
Revolting, but in a good way. Why does porn make me queasy? Should there be parenthesis' around L2 in the 1st Haiku?
wow..this starts strong then rapidly falls appart. simply because crows don't listen very well. because they are birds. with small brains. bird brainse
Very strong, Christof. Zzin informed me you hit number 1 on p'ranker; good for you. Couldn't happen to a nicer guy. But, we're hot on your heals.
brillant...this just proves that no matter where I go online anymore I'll be face to face with porn. :::sigh::: oh well, back to making my porn page.
I suppose if it means nothing it is worth nothing...
great piece. hats off, but the titles gotta go, because of the leonard cohen song relation. perhaps 'brimstone the rabbits foot' or gravedigging for mangos? the pocketed banana. 'taming the lap snorkel' ah fuck it. good work 8.
great piece. hats off, but the titles gotta go, because of the leonard cohen song relation. perhaps 'brimstone the rabbits foot' or gravedigging for mangos? the pocketed banana. 'taming the lap snorkel' ah fuck it. good work 8.
great piece. hats off, but the titles gotta go, because of the leonard cohen song relation. perhaps 'brimstone the rabbits foot' or gravedigging for mangos? the pocketed banana. 'taming the lap snorkel' ah fuck it. good work 8.
the sad thing is deep down he wants to be. caught, that is
and spanked with his mothers 11 inck black dildo. 8.
i hope it was a double scoop of corned poop. fix your damn conjunctions for the love of jesu. this belongs on a sticky tab in his briefcase. not mocking my lonely masturbatory rituals 'pon my screen. you've crushed my loveless spleen. wench.
Are you really 13?
Shocking. Many poets on this site post twaddle which hint at talent, thought, inspiration etc. You, however, are merely shit. 0. Get off the internet, you're late for nursery.
muy bueno mis peque??os pescados -10/10