great...really great...

good...but too many spelling errors !

i wont read this again. ever.

You've got creative, scary ideas. Much better than some others who've tried this sort of poetry on this site.

I suppose from my own poems the comment will be obvious: I love your imagery, but I don't really like the form. This is something that always annoys me in much of the best modern poetry. I look at it and think, 'This is bloody brilliant, to say the least. It's wonderful. Why don't I like it much?' Really a bit annoying, that.

pleasantly wrapped up.hows the surf though?

i thought i voted on this one all ready...ah well maybe deja view!? the work of a jew? my corked kangaroo...kill mr. magoo? but enough of that nonsense...you have a valid and well observed point..i know..just barely cuz my son jusat started pre-school...sorry to hear about the soup...i'll send you a smoother upswinged recipe next time...

but what?...you wanted him to give you the old ins and outs instead of her huh?...aye..my love! that's it precisely one boy one girl and a scorned one living in denial.. pray for forgiveness your mind is unclean.

If only joy could exist but alas I fear not. This is a poem of hope. 9+

looks like a drunk peeing in the snow you purring little cloud leopard you...hi z..!! missing you! can't wait to finish up this play..so much fucking rehearsal it's cutting into my ranking time...im just a bit perturbed...bastards..can you believe someone...hmm.hmm. labled some of bachus' poems stolen..hah! i know that piker and his hoof might be bitter, but he still has fucking pride...bastards wish they could dismiss him that easy..i know he's not one for ass kissing but jesus, to rewrite someone elses work is totally pathetic(cutting out and pasting is different, but only if it's darkangels&company and going in the bachus tribunal) can you imagine...of course they would never accuse you of that..so do me a favor..flip them off for bachus' and "for my friends"!!!!

I never thought it would come to this, but p&K is right. plagiarists must be broken on the wheel after being skinned alive. that's just pathetic. Go away, doggie. you need to be put to sleep.

if my poem blackbuns is plagerized. i would really be most impressed if you could show me how please, and i will happily proof you wrong...i fucking demand you follow your accusation with some proof mr. "johnny on patrol" because that haiku isd far from stolen unless i'm stealing from myself these days..cad.

This lacks compassion. It's scary which is good but you need to develop your characters more. Read 'No Angel Came"

Not bad. Not good but not bad. There's no emotion. I going to a Dodger game and then I'm camping all weekend. Talk with you on Monday.

Stereotyperiffic!

Methinks you have a libido; nice work.

I think it is a really good poem...keep up the good work //em

rarr! =)

Well that poem was kinda different! But hopefully that poem was not about you! Life is too precious to be slitting your wrists! Nothing could ever be that important to want to hurt yourself! Please think about what I have said!

This is not poetry. It is perhaps an interesting essay, though it could use some tweaking, but it is not poetry. It is an essay with arbitrary line breaks.