pete
on A Man Of The World by vulcan
14 Sep 2002, 12:58 AM
:-) ..... 5
;-D for the ps . no vote
:-) ...... 4
no comment and impossible to vote .... i'll just shut up .
blinded by too much sun .... 2
sounds like you woke from a nice dream to a nasty reality .... would have worked better for me if fairy fiddle and gate were on separate lines as then killing the gate would have had more impact ..... 4
Gold will tell others the words we have said ..... no comprendo .... the rest has definitely got something , shows feeling and thought ..... your feline escort is plural , is that condensed into your one lover ? ... 6
sounds like its chock-full of meaning ..... couple of typos ( ? ) stop me searching for it ..... 4
wouldn't worry about them ..... fuck 'em ! ...... 4
that'as what friends are for ..... a good cry is great but self pity in a poem doesn't do it .. 3
bloody 'ell ! .... that woke me up ... 7
see pete! that's why hippies talk alot of shit , but in reality they know shite? it's about the dullery of taking care of incompitent others (that you love more than hate !?) and skillfully wishing for hot sexy lusty longterm love and adventure. not death .twit . you say 4 ..i say double. you want trouble. cuz i got a tipping plate of it.fucker. 8/10.
I lick kitty. Then throw it around the corner to check back again, tomorrow.
what crap , one thinks at the start .... then balloons beating bashfully reinforce blueness to grab attention .. and then superior literary knowledge demands more respect ... an interesting acceptance curve ... is nuisant from nuisance or of the night ? .... could i suggest use of (i think ) subjunctive ... were it not for S's sake .... 6
royalflesh
on Remember-me (an ode to those dropped off at the clinic) by Bachus
14 Sep 2002, 1:17 AM
tantilizing. metamorphic beauty. Read it over just to see fuzzy again. Definitely top quality and makes me fondle the quality of my other night (project) task of looking out for my counter (part). 9
when you get there there's no there there ( D Parker i think) the old human condition again ... 5
this is too good for a comparison with male onanism to sound anything but trite and crass , also the loss of millions for every successful conception but i've just woken up and can't figure how to stake my masculine claim in the life process more gracefully ..... 6, also the love you do express seems pretty good to me :-)
there's a lot of it about ; i'm surprised you were surprised . nice pome though ... no need to emphasise your non-gayness methinks ... 5