Limness
on Swimming by [mojo]
12 Sep 2002, 8:11 AM
Perhaps a companion would make this swim possible once again?
Who's next?
I think you've been reading too many lyrics.
How are tears magic?
You cannot actually have a brain you are a small minded individual with no thought to people who actually are ill. Sick. YUCK! BLECH! GAG!:( This is sick and sad. You are a narrow minded prick. You say we should be praying for these sick people, you should pray for them instead of preying on them, making there illness a joke, you are seriously going to offend someone with the disease, or someone with a family member that has it. Make a joke that is funny not sick. What the hell is your problem. You are the first one to dogg someone elsa's poem, and they're actually wrighting about somthing for a cause or that means somthing to them, you are writing just to frustrate and offend people with. I dont know about everyone elsa, I can't speak for them but i want you off this website.
Am I being dense? Is 'the only option" the same as 'the final solution' in ww2?
I have tried, but can make no sense of this. which would be fine, if it least entertained me. but it does not. how sad.
Hmm...don't you hate it when someone goes on and on about something so friverless? And it's just constant chitter chatter? Nothing really that important, it really doesn't say anything, I really hate those, So that means, I love this one! Bravo Mr. Angel, Bravo. But you like mestioned someone being gay like ever ine, LoL. What's up with that? LoL. JK =) 9/10!
Crikey. This is sex-o-matic. You are a saucy thing, this is too much for me on a Thursday afternoon. Take a look at my revised 'Gone Away' - zzinnia and I sussed out the ending earlier today.
You should go through these and give them agood haircut. Take ALL the small unnecessary words out, i.e.; 'Spring feels of joy. New life begins to bud'. Also spring is not like a tree replcing it's leaves spring IS a tree replacing it's leaves. Get rid of every single "that" nothing will kill a piece of writing quicker. Poem, prose novel or letter. Good luck!
perhaps 'burdensome beast' would work better for you. a beast of burden is an ox, or the like, and i don't think you're writing about going around with farm animals strapped to your back. regardless, i hope that, by now, you have shed it.
And certainly beyond the scope of this poem.
Almost lovely and full of empty. are there up so many floating bells down in this meadow of yours?
BRAVO!!!! WELL DONE, SIR! You are indeed a champion, and prove without a doubt that the keyboard is mightier than AIDS (but not mightier than Jesu, of course.)
Come on,Dark-angel!I read it for your sake and enjoyed it.reconcile?8
Do you really want everyone to get stuck at the title? If not, I suggest you change it.
the last images paint an unforgottable picture.9
Dark indeed!7