This made me laugh-10/10

the last 4 lines ruin the poem. martyrdom does not suit you.

This convinces me. It's funny, then it's funny again, then it's hollow and sad. Wahey!

sweet. pure. so very necessary.

Yep that last line is a killer. Belies everything that goes before it and is good for that reason.

why did you delete my comment?

p&k, these are bare-bones beautiful.

sometimes, i fucking hate you because you make my brain hurt. sometimes i love you as the god your name belies, 'cause no one but a god could make me feel like this inside. mostly, i save you for late at night, when i'm all alone, the only one left awake, and i call you up, and savor your words, let them wash me with now-told worlds i didn't imagine, and drown in the light they shine in my eyes. churned up inside over the riddles and twists, it takes a late and lonely night to swallow these whole. fuck you h. fuck you and thanks. your bosomed buddy, z.

my eyes bleed, watching awards shows. are you perhaps giving the command, make my cock hard, since the show itself is not work the electricity wasted on it? i'd rather be screwing than watching these, that's for damn sure. 7, for making me laugh, big finale.

i want this to be something else. why on earth would i need a teddy bear? wisdom from fluff? sorry sapphire, i don't buy it. i'm almost willing to, but you don't convince me.

As a woman this speaks to me, I wish my man felt the same-9/10

I have similar experience-very true to life-10/10

I don't think this is sweet, it's a harsh and bitter - and it's good because of that. Very psychologically aware of what happens between two people in an unequal relationship. Yes indeedy.

find yourself a summer girl, and let her aphrodesiac warm your heart, so that it never again worships at that cold temple

yes. a true wish. ahhh.

very good, lyrical-9/10

If you've turned your keyboard green there must be something very wrong with your genito-urinary tract. Take yourself to the clinic at once. What was the point of this?

she sounds tempting and delicious. i don't think you need 'had' in the first line.

Cryptic and curt and I like it. If only life were really this arithmetical

Good work-9/10