Shin-Bojangles
on A Hard Lesson Learned by kristenk69lover
29 Aug 2002, 11:19 PM
Well, at least you're not forcing your opinion on anyone... who cares. BOOYEAH. Let's both shut up now and give the brilliance some breathing space, shall we?
is nothing. you okay. maybe. okay.
If I worte this and then read these, I'd be pretty pissed. But I'm just bitter. Deepest sympathies; it's very pretty. I think.
These are fantastic, from one who's been there. I'll give it a 10/10 to make up for anything you may have lost in the revisions.
Bachus
on Prologue-Epilogue: A Self-Indulgent Peice of Tripe by Shin-Bojangles
29 Aug 2002, 10:45 PM
nice.thmmppppp.
It is not pretty. It is brillant!!!! and God's Wife is on vacation!
The White Stripes are fucking sweet. I knew I would't be alone in immortalizing them in Haiku.
Kristen - you have potential, keep working on it. And if you want some true critique and help, there are some wonderful poets that can help you on this site. Just ask them for help. Specifically, zzinnia and god's wife can be very helpful to struggling poets in the mist.
Sigh... they just don't understand, do they Bilbo?
venus don't be nieve! this is the dark one dressed in head gear...trust me...D.A! DAMNIT get out of the tart immediately...i rebuke you!!!!!o
has somebody not been getting enough attention lately? okay! somebody hug nentwined so we can go about our business cuz i'm getting fucking bombarded over here...i can only pray mine are doing that to him...fuck! check out me knew haiku series to mtv its riveting and full of bavarian creme!FUCK YEAH REVOLUTIONNNN REVOLT AGAINST THE MAN, THE BLACKS THE WHITES, THE SPICS.THE WOPS,THE POOS, THE JEWS, THE REDNECKS THE DIKES ha...everyone against everyone yes i hate myself most of al;l yeahhhhhhhhhhhh,,,fuck michael j, and limp peanuts and all of them ahhhhhhhhhhhhh. the vines are cool though. was he mad....he sucked.....what wever wappened to fuuckingMUSSSSIIIIIICCCCCC. fuck. fuck yu too. fuckers
Wow, look at that form!! Brillant poem!!
so there's fifty altogether. cool, or huh sorry....fuck it....change #50 last line to / the phone stopped ringing/ or/ marajuana urge?u
Stop following me or I'll tell. I say it's pretty because I don't feel qulaified to judge a peice of this apparent sincereity, since I know jack-all about poetry. All I know is it didn't make me feel any different that I did when I started, but the wording seemed very nice. Okay? Is that a more acceptable response for the Magistrate? Crimeny.
I am not following you. I am reading the comments. And clicking. Procrastinating job...and okay it is pretty brillant!!!!
indeed. detroit duo. siblings. sexy drummer. aggression and classy guitar antics. yet humble....
god.......i've cum. sorry. see you tomorrow.
not the poem freak. you. how r u feeling? that's all! jesus...be polite and every gets defensive.
I love you too, Baby. Why is baby a proper noun, though? Is there someone else? Who will stick up for you when I am gone. This is true art. I am hanging it on my wall.