Very simple but expressive, you got your feelings across quit honestly

Keep it real, but unending

I like this piece Ming. 8. It could hardly be described as politically correct, but that makes it all the more amusing. The punchline is stark and bold.

How sad but true... Nicely felt by Da1

highly impressive...you can write charming poems

your pain comes across, give it time and remember that he love'd you. Make him proud of who your are and who you will be.

PIMP!

Yes, i read as much media as the siberian wasteland will allow to reach me..it's cold, and there aren't enough lost children around here to eat. Yet.

I could see this put to music; somehow reminds me of 'This Flight Tonight' (Joni, Nazareth).

now, if only Doylum would follow form, and entertain us thusly.

As lovely as it is saucy... it's a cool 8 and some change, atleast in my opinion, Da1

teen-spirited, and universally relative. Keep saucilating, Da1

Fantasy concept that flows, Liked it as much as possible5/10... Da1

the 2 lines of the second stanza give a nice sense of loss...

a sudden ending...7/10

Philosophiliscious, of the hook(disconnected!)... Stupendiatanial yet conflicted in some sexy type of way. In other words,"WOW!"

I can imagine it would. You don't necessarily have to audibly respond to something in order to have hesitation. Can someone not hesitate to commit an action (conceivably, when there's nobody around to talk to)?

Weird but... I quess.

again, i took part of it. i think i like it now.

ah, love. the kind that leaves a stain.