| Re: Border towns & the runs by horus8 |
klosterfobik 64.12.116.140 |
10-Sep-04/10:53 PM |
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| Re: Monday night football, Tueasday? War. by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
klosterfobik 64.12.116.140 |
10-Sep-04/10:51 PM |
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| Re: i'm the jesse james of the seven-eleven chain by Bachus |
Doug 64.12.116.140 |
10-Sep-04/11:01 PM |
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| Re: Hey! Shut up, and cut my grass. by horus8 |
unnesessary 64.12.116.140 |
10-Sep-04/10:34 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Doug 64.12.116.140 |
10-Sep-04/11:03 PM |
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| Re: You wash up, I forget. by Bachus |
Doug 64.12.116.140 |
10-Sep-04/11:05 PM |
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| Re: Wigging out by Jeremi B. Handrinos |
unnesessary 64.12.116.140 |
10-Sep-04/10:36 PM |
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No!not another wig bush!!!!!
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| Re: A Poem by BigB |
BigB 202.156.2.50 |
11-Sep-04/6:28 AM |
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ambiguity in a poem is something that makes a poem so beautiful, something that is worth discussing, something worth talking about. We do not live in a black or white society, but rather one that is in shades of gray. everyone is entitled to his or her opinion and nobody can take that away from him. the world we live in is in shades of gray, and for that, I 'm grateful.
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| Re: A Poem by BigB |
some deleted user 81.178.202.250 |
11-Sep-04/12:34 PM |
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The poem is not too bad. Line six onward loses the thread a bit. The ground is not likely to engulf him lest still into eternal darkness. And trees do not cry blood.
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some deleted user 81.178.202.250 |
11-Sep-04/1:57 PM |
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I think the jaggedness problem is that the linebreaks are too frequent. It would be more lyrical with thicker chunks.
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| Re: School 61 by unnesessary |
some deleted user 81.178.202.250 |
11-Sep-04/1:59 PM |
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Patricia street is needlessly ambiguous because it could be a person or a street.
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| Re: Scars by Pervy Elf |
some deleted user 81.178.202.250 |
11-Sep-04/2:01 PM |
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Mared should be marred. People do not tend to pick at scabs and hope they heal. A rasping 'you think picking at scabs will make them heal' would probably be better.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
horus8 24.130.62.102 |
11-Sep-04/2:13 PM |
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| Re: School 61 by unnesessary |
horus8 24.130.62.102 |
11-Sep-04/2:14 PM |
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| Re: The Gray Idea by Doug |
horus8 24.130.62.102 |
11-Sep-04/2:16 PM |
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A shit sandwich, hold the bread.
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| Re: A Strenuous Recollection by Doug |
horus8 24.130.62.102 |
11-Sep-04/2:17 PM |
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I've seen mooseknuckles with more style and flair.
This is just bad writing, but with emphasis on
what it's like to be black, poor, and in a dress.
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| Re: A Choice by Dovina |
Enchantres 145.53.203.34 |
11-Sep-04/2:48 PM |
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Very thoughtfull poem, I really like the way you write.
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| Re: Lord Byron Gave Mary Her Shelly by horus8 |
klosterfobik 205.188.116.140 |
11-Sep-04/2:53 PM |
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A sack of shit inside a bag of trash,sitting in a puddle of piss.
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| Re: Dare by LintyWeenis |
LintyWeenis 152.163.101.10 |
11-Sep-04/3:24 PM |
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Well, I say it's open to interpretation because if someone reads it and thinks that this person is screaming out of excitement, well then that's what they get. I personally wrote it with that person screaming in fear because I'm about to go hallin' ass down a busy freeway. I can see where I could use some clarity but grammar?
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| Re: A Choice by Dovina |
LintyWeenis 152.163.101.10 |
11-Sep-04/3:28 PM |
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"They make me glad". I don't know much about poetry, I mean I read and write the stuff and maybe it's just my simple understanding, but the line "They make me glad." kind of dropped me. I liked the poem though.
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