Re: Anthony & Kimberly by Brandy_n_Cali	nentwined 66.92.183.34	7-Sep-04/8:29 PM
double meh.
Re: Winters Death by Brandy_n_Cali	nentwined 66.92.183.34	7-Sep-04/8:31 PM
odd. I think better than a lot of your stuff simply through obfuscation and length.
Re: Easier To Say Good-bye by Brandy_n_Cali	nentwined 66.92.183.34	7-Sep-04/8:32 PM
a little less pretension could help this.
Re: Black Love by Faulk	Shardik 24.130.62.63	7-Sep-04/8:58 PM
As ethnic as a turban at a cab stand.
Re: I WILL SURVIVE by massangel62	Dovina 24.52.157.176	7-Sep-04/7:22 PM
This isn't very well written, but maybe I couldn't do better in your circumstance.
Re: Delicate Was by klosterfobik	Dovina 24.52.157.176	7-Sep-04/7:31 PM
I see you changed the ending, and the rest seems all different too. "perfect and peculiar us" is very nice.
Re: I Don't Care by ForgottenSoul17	Brandy_n_Cali 4.182.251.103	7-Sep-04/7:46 PM
nice!! reminds me of one of my own
Re: Love Lie's In Misery by Brandy_n_Cali	nentwined 66.92.183.34	7-Sep-04/8:19 PM
please, please, please learn how to pluralize words and what apostrophes are for! flow is awkward, concept overdone without anything to really sell it. why free verse with random line breaks when you go to such trouble to rhyme every "sentence"?
Re: ~YOUR TURN~ by Brandy_n_Cali	nentwined 66.92.183.34	7-Sep-04/8:26 PM
a rambling rant, awkward flow, nothing new. try painting the picture of the person and situation that is causing these words to spew forth. make us feel the words instead of just throwing them out.
Re: Love Lie's In Misery by Brandy_n_Cali	Shardik 24.130.62.63	7-Sep-04/9:00 PM
A pickle in a skirt.
regarding some deleted poem...	Shardik 24.130.62.63	7-Sep-04/9:01 PM
Ahhhh...
Re: Delicate Was by klosterfobik	Shardik 24.130.62.63	7-Sep-04/9:06 PM
I once buggered an otter named Luke.
Re: Disregardance by klosterfobik	Shardik 24.130.62.63	7-Sep-04/9:09 PM
'taint bad, but 'taint begging for a publishing neither.
Re: Beneath The Undertow by longships	Shardik 24.130.62.63	7-Sep-04/9:18 PM
If you think that beginning each of your tawdry blasphemous stanzas with the ACE line "beneath the undertow" makes this poem anymore tolerable, you're right! Asshat. Let's do it for the planet guys!!! What the fuck?!
Re: New Year by emilyowey	Shardik 24.130.62.63	7-Sep-04/9:46 PM
A crouton in a maelstrom.
Re: Into My World by sliver	arduinn 165.21.83.230	7-Sep-04/10:55 PM
I especially like the last verse.. Good work here..
Re: to my best friend david by wowzers718	AM I EVIL? 24.71.61.94	8-Sep-04/12:15 AM
nice story
Re: Driftwood by GekoHawaii	AM I EVIL? 24.71.61.94	8-Sep-04/12:21 AM
nice flow and good rhymes and good story
Re: A Poem by BigB	BigB 202.156.2.138	8-Sep-04/12:39 AM
we're a small country.we dont have scenery or whatever. the only thing we're proud of is our country's cleanliness.Its really clean though
Re: Driftwood by GekoHawaii	zodiac 213.186.171.49	8-Sep-04/1:13 AM
Would you agree that the song "Driftwood" by Travis is the most insidious and unnecessarily popular song ever?