| Re: A Flower for Monet by Shuushin |
Christof 217.44.77.236 |
3-Sep-04/8:21 AM |
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Despite a certain fey quality, very good.
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| Re: Disregardance by klosterfobik |
Brandy_n_Cali 4.182.108.224 |
2-Sep-04/11:59 PM |
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Christof 217.44.77.236 |
3-Sep-04/2:40 AM |
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Very encouraging first two stanzas.
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| Re: Lord Byron Gave Mary Her Shelly by horus8 |
fair12 66.84.225.2 |
3-Sep-04/7:09 AM |
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I like the intensity to this piece - it's darkness. I made me want to keep reading until the end.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
Christof 217.44.77.236 |
3-Sep-04/8:24 AM |
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This is obviously a horrible horible thing to go through. I can't imagine how awful it must feel. And at this point the criticism of your poetry becomes redundant, because this isn't poetry and has no literary value; but as a document of your pain and suffering it has a value of its own. If this is your therapy, carry on and God help you.
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| Re: Two Basic Forces by dougsoderstrom |
Christof 217.44.77.236 |
3-Sep-04/8:27 AM |
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More a pensee than a poem. Worth saying though. A hint of Nietzsche.
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| Re: My Own World War by shit |
Christof 217.44.77.236 |
3-Sep-04/8:31 AM |
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The metaphor is completely overworked and the relation of the World war, Hitler, Goebbels etc. to yourself is so unbelievably narcissistic and self-indulgent that it makes me rather angry. Who do you think you are? Jesus, have some perspective. Moreover, this is illiterate- 'It has began'? And that's only line 2. Add into that the lumpy graceless metre and this is terrible.
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| Re: A Toast to Us! by singinkygal |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.163.133 |
3-Sep-04/8:34 AM |
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Passionately stupid. Terrifyingly lewd. Breathtakingly beautiful. -10-
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| Re: Come off with me Carly back into the city by zodiac |
Christof 217.44.77.236 |
3-Sep-04/8:36 AM |
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That is a very smooth performance hiding a heavy wieght of emotion. That's really great. And it sounds beautiful too.
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| Re: My Own World War by shit |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.163.133 |
3-Sep-04/8:52 AM |
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A Gentleman never wrestles with himself, unless it is during a bow'l movement, or following a disastrously inept attempt at the reverse sweep. There is little evidence to suggest either of these two misadventures, here. Frankly, it fails. You fail.
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| Re: Two Basic Forces by dougsoderstrom |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.154.163.133 |
3-Sep-04/9:49 AM |
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Two forces? Pish! I don't understand why you think it impossible that man's capacity to care for the welfare of others could not have been brought about by evolution. Did it ever occur to you that an individual's survival may depend upon the welfare of others? Did it ever occur to you that a group's survival may depend upon its capacity to cooperate, and on the capacity of individuals within the group to compromise for the benefit of the group? Evolution doesn't have an aim as such; as we understand it today, it is brought about by random mutation and natural selection. There is no reason why random mutations couldn't lead to characteristics we'd associate with kindness, and it is not necessarily the case that such characteristics would be disadvantageous. I think you misunderstand evolution. In fact, I think you misunderstand so many things that "Wisdom Poetry" probably isn't your thing. I recommend the moving of bow'ls -10-
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| Re: Love Letter by wilco |
sliver 63.190.73.230 |
3-Sep-04/10:09 AM |
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Well done wilco, I really enjoyed reading this one!
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| Re: FALLING ASLEEP by AM I EVIL? |
sliver 63.190.73.230 |
3-Sep-04/10:16 AM |
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oooh k, kinda common, try to spice it up.
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| Re: crash&burn by AM I EVIL? |
sliver 63.190.73.230 |
3-Sep-04/10:19 AM |
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Much better than the other one I read. You should spend some time reading some of the stuff here, might do you good.
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| Re: Lord Byron Gave Mary Her Shelly by horus8 |
sliver 63.190.73.230 |
3-Sep-04/10:22 AM |
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Some parts grabbed me much more than others, but I actually liked this a little, surprised? hell shocked me.
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| Re: happy birthday by rnsbreeze |
sliver 63.190.73.230 |
3-Sep-04/10:25 AM |
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I enjoyed it, hallmarkey or not.
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| Re: A Toast to Us! by singinkygal |
Dovina 24.52.157.176 |
3-Sep-04/11:15 AM |
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A perfect expression of passion.
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| Re: untitled by AM I EVIL? |
horus8 24.130.62.63 |
3-Sep-04/3:20 PM |
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A potato chip in a flash flood.
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| Re: Two Basic Forces by dougsoderstrom |
-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 194.222.223.239 |
3-Sep-04/7:45 PM |
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Why don't you at least make the most rudimentary effort to earn your fucking pseudo-professor's salary by reading a couple of books concerning your supposed expert subject matter, motherfucker?
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| Re: Two Basic Forces by dougsoderstrom |
some deleted user 194.222.223.239 |
3-Sep-04/7:42 PM |
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1. Suppose there is a gene which causes an individual to risk their life to the degree of < 1/2 in order to save a parent, sibling or child.
2. A parent, sibling or child shares 1/2 of your genes with you.
3. Hence in a population where < 1/2 individuals sacrifice their lives to save their parents, siblings or children, and 1/2 of those parents, siblings or children share the kin-sacrifice gene, > 0 individuals with the kin sacrifice gene will survive and pass on the kin sacrifice gene.
4. Hence according to the simple, deterministic rules of evolution, which you seem to assume must always be self-serving, altruism in favour of one's kin will prosper as a pattern of behaviour.
5. Despite being a self-styled "professor" who "specialises" in the "relationship" between "human" "psychology" and "morality", you fail to grasp even the most basic facts of such a relationship.
6. You are the most guff-filled ballsack of a poemranker contributor that I have ever had the tedious displeasure to have to filter out in my daily trawl of poem-recent.jsp
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