Re: St. Patrick’s Cathedral by Dovina	patty t 212.20.245.14	27-Aug-04/12:03 AM
sad and beautiful
regarding some deleted poem...	patty t 212.20.245.14	27-Aug-04/12:04 AM
you damn fool. nice poem.
Re: St. Patrick’s Cathedral by Dovina	Prince of Void 217.218.131.144	27-Aug-04/1:58 AM
i love the poem ..it touchs inside my soul ..
regarding some deleted poem...	Christof 217.44.77.236	27-Aug-04/5:57 AM
Nope. Still not there yet.
Re: faces unknown by daggatolar	Prince of Void 217.218.131.144	27-Aug-04/2:07 AM
in my point of view i like this poem ..the theme is considerable ..that's good
regarding some deleted poem...	Brandy_n_Cali 4.182.90.139	27-Aug-04/6:39 AM
NICE POEM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Re: Abuse by QuirkyWonder	Brandy_n_Cali 4.182.90.139	27-Aug-04/6:50 AM
I REALLY ENJOY THIS POEM!!
Re: Countervail by D. $ Fontera	nentwined 66.92.28.14	27-Aug-04/10:59 AM
I don't think I really get what this is saying.
Re: If time can not persuade, then one must goad. by SupremeDreamer	Christof 217.44.77.236	27-Aug-04/6:01 AM
Why follow a rhyme scheme, then desert it, then take up another half-arsed one in the last stanza? I can't see that it contributes anything to this poem; there seems to be no formal point to doing it. It jars.
Re: Oh So Hollow by etherealmaiden	nentwined 66.92.28.14	27-Aug-04/11:01 AM
the flow is very solid; the content blase.
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	27-Aug-04/9:59 AM
"I did it offensively, so that I would not have to do it defensively." "I was a fool." Are you taking lessons from Bush in Iraq?
Re: Smoking Skies by Enchantres	nentwined 66.92.28.14	27-Aug-04/10:57 AM
breath -> breathe; it's -> its the rule to put a comma wherever you want a breath is simply wrong.
Re: Internal Dialogue (Mental Cock-Slapping & Anal Discipline) by DreamerSupreme	nentwined 66.92.28.14	27-Aug-04/11:03 AM
boring and repetitive.
Re: Hold and hold me hold tight by somemorepoetry	nentwined 66.92.28.14	27-Aug-04/10:55 AM
this is pretty cool. I was a bit worried by the gimmick early on, but... it flows nicely; definitely captures something and shares it. :)
regarding some deleted poem...	Dovina 24.52.157.176	27-Aug-04/10:09 AM
A pleasing flow of jumble. Maybe not a "saleable output" but "one nugget of clarity": "irony being the description of that which is iron."
Re: Swimming in Space & Fishing for the Luridness Monster by SupremeDreamer	nentwined 66.92.28.14	26-Aug-04/1:16 PM
too much cliche, even if it does contain some of my favorite words.
Re: Knowledge has such high demands by Torok	nentwined 66.92.28.14	26-Aug-04/12:28 PM
I carry my possession that you possess to church every day? I think this is supposed to be a semi-riddle on knowledge, but I do not see how to put all the pieces together.
Re: faces unknown by daggatolar	Dovina 24.52.157.176	26-Aug-04/1:17 PM
I'm staring at stars and stairing up to pluck them, a pretty sight in my blindness. But my heart is healed by a hill on the land, so all is cool. ????
Re: Through Your Frown by Blindpoetry	nentwined 66.92.28.14	26-Aug-04/2:53 PM
the flow/rhythm of this is lacking. the idea--I think I get what you're saying, but it takes inspection. The telling and showing seem to be confused--the telling superfluous, except tha the showing is hard to understand--but even then the telling doesn't help as much as it could. I'd say work more on visualizing what's going on--try to think a little less.
Re: solitude by darylchew	Dovina 24.52.157.176	27-Aug-04/9:55 AM
Poems about suicide either relieve the tendency or increase it. Some of them make suicide look ordinary and alright, an individual choice, and not unkind. Some folks may vote you down because you have said nothing about a rather permanent decision and all that it ignores. I am one of them.